Poem 54.  The Star

Poem 54. The Star

A Chapter by Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)
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Once in my life, I looked up the sky...

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Once in my life I dreamed of a star

        Brilliant

         Clever

         Dazzling.

 

I became a victim of it’s beauty

         Naive

         Wistful

         Raw.

 

So much pain was there

        Longing

        Waiting

        Dreaming.

 

But last night I woke up

         I realized

         I admitted

         Liven up.

 

It was just a dream

         For a star

         An unreachable star

         That couldn’t be mine.

         

So now, I’m no longer looking up

          To seek for another star

          For there are more beautiful things

          Beside me.



© 2013 Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)


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So now, I’m no longer looking up
To seek for another star
For there are more beautiful things
Beside me.

Precisely, there are more beautiful things beside and inside us that are waiting to be recognized and or to be tap...I think it is with man's nature that we sometimes forgot to notice those little yet more important things around us in quest for a bigger dream, but what is good here from the speaker is that she realized the lapses.

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Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Ms. Belle.
Belle

6 Years Ago

You know that you are always welcome, Dhaye. Keep penning and sharing...and good early morning! Life.. read more



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DrD
This is a marvelously thoughtful work filled with sensitivity and raw emotion. I liked the style and form and in all, it is a truly enjoyable read.

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Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

6 Years Ago

Thanks, DrD.
This is a beautiful piece, your clever drop down rhythmic approach really works superbly, a masterful composition here my friend, brilliant, very well done!!

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So now, I’m no longer looking up
To seek for another star
For there are more beautiful things
Beside me.

Precisely, there are more beautiful things beside and inside us that are waiting to be recognized and or to be tap...I think it is with man's nature that we sometimes forgot to notice those little yet more important things around us in quest for a bigger dream, but what is good here from the speaker is that she realized the lapses.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Ms. Belle.
Belle

6 Years Ago

You know that you are always welcome, Dhaye. Keep penning and sharing...and good early morning! Life.. read more
I think this is one of your best. I love the message here and I like the gradual progression of the poem...Bravo...
In my library

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

6 Years Ago

Thank you. I appreciate the kind words.
Sami Khalil

6 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)
i love the theme of this. While there's nothing wrong in aiming for the stars or anything that is gigantic, we must also be able to determine what is reasonable, realistic and feasible.

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Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

6 Years Ago

So true, Gab. Thanks for the time in this simple piece.

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Hello! I am Dhaye, a public secondary school teacher, a passionate artist "married" to her dream. I write in different perspectives. So please know NOT all my works are about me. .. more..

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