A PRAYER

Help Us, Lord

What's more important than to live this life with peace?
What's more comforting when you see yourself at ease?
If I have to say only words in masks, will I achieve them both?
If I have to pretend with smile, will there be perfect world?


I am lifting my life, to you, Lord, hear my prayer

I won't deny my past had wounded me this way

Look at my heart, please heal it, I need Your mending touch
I trust You, we'll be fine, and I thank You so much!

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ees]

Lose the pictures so that I can focus on the words.

Nice prayer. Admirable sentiments.

look at this one line though:
"I won't deny my past have wounded me this way"- this isn't phrased quite properly. It should be something like:
I won't deny my past has wounded me- actually yeah, it isn't just the "have" not being used properly, you don't need the "this way" seeing as what way doesn't matter in a prayer and because you haven't told us what way it has wounded. The important thing is admitting it and asking God for assistance and I think those points come across strongly in all the other lines.

Great job

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Okay, thanks for the suggestion. I'll change have to has...it should be singular, why I've overlooked that? LOL. I won't take out "this way" unless you'll suggest better words. Hehe. You see, there's a rhyme scheme in the poem.
Thanks for peeking in.

[Ees]

Everybody overlooks that stuff in their own work. I think it is because we know what we meant for our fingers to write... those types of easy mistakes are always spotted more easily by strange eyes I think.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is wo wonderfully uplifting, all I need to say is Amen.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the read, cowboy.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are so welcome.

[Bright Ocean Star]

Very nice, Dhaye...but one small thing only....a very small thing. "Look at my heart (should be a semi-colon, I think) please heal it, I need your mending touch. Otherwise, it is beautiful and perfect. I love prayers. They speak to my heart. Great job!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, BOS.

[Rose of many colours]

Great prayer, you dug deep within Keep writing, growing and believing, God knows your name..

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you.

[Rose of many colours]

Bless God for you

[NeiL ArandA]

God can heal a brokenheart.Give back all the pieces to Him

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes, I believe. Without Him, and with those problems I encountered, perhaps I'm not still Dhaye. LOL

[Coyote Poetry]

'What's more important than to live this life with peace?'
Most of us dream of peace. For our life and our world. Beautiful and hopeful thoughts in the poem and prayer. Thank you.
Coyote

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much for dropping by.

[Belle]

In the face of many uncertainties there is nothing wrong to cling on hope. I am not sure exactly if this is from my mind or I've read this somewhere. With all the stuffs I've read, there are times I find it difficult to remember if the thought is originally from me or not. But here is the sure thing, that what came up me after reading this prayer from the deep of your heart.

With all the prayers in this page, you made me think that you are a nun in your past life.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

LOL. Nun in my past life...I just trying to make a book of poems about faith...about prayers, or something inspirational.
Thanks a lot, Ms. Belle. :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

LOL. Nun in my past life...I'm just trying to make a book of poems about faith...about prayers, or something inspirational.
Thanks a lot, Ms. Belle. :)

[Belle]

Oh, now I know. Bless you on that new endeavor...

[Pryde Foltz]

Very nice, dhaye. May your heart find its healing.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Pryde. :)

[SyberRose]

Beautiful words and such a touching video...Enjoyed dhaye...Rose:)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Rose. :)