I REMEMBER (Couplets)

I always will

Oh, my darling you're no longer here
But memories of you seem present everywhere

I remember the times when you and I sing
The songs you wrote for me and the joy they bring

I remember the verses of that poem just for me
The exceptional lines, those emotions are free

I remember the scene in that painting you made
The brush and  the canvass, the colors which don't fade

Ah, my darling you're not here anymore
But our beautiful story will be forevermore

I will sing the high notes of our favorite song
That would make me feel calm, that would make me strong

I will tell them the verses of our favorite poem
That would echo in their hearts and make them feel at home

I will paint the picture of that beautiful sea
The tide and the ship, and what they mean to me

Ah, my darling you can't be mine forever
But such beautiful story, I will always remember.

Author's Note

Couplet. This type of poem is two lines which may be rhymed or unrhymed.

Reviews

[NeiL ArandA]

" I will paint the picture of that beautiful sea
The tide and the ship, and what they mean to me "
Dhaye ... I truly like these words and line... I was trying to pen a piece last night. And it was titled
Pacific Rose ...Its a romantic love between a girl and a sailor . I wonder if you let me borrow your line ? LOL ...Just kidding ... You are inspiring me here . I think I will go for it full force..
The song here is very beautiful and relaxing...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Glad I can inspire someone. You see, I'm making a book here, Neil.

[Blue]

I was almost on the verge of tears while reading this, Ate. Seems like I'm reading my heart's mind... The message is...hmm...I want to curl up in bed and soak my pillow with tears as I wallow in "our" memories. Sigh.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

To remember....is the only way how to get in touch with someone dear, isn't it?

Thanks, sis. I appreciate your visit so much. =)

[Blue]

I can say the same thing with your visits, Ate.

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful photo and words. Good memories become better with time. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, CP.

[Baby Ricochet]

Good rhymes. Remember the good times. It's a beautiful thing

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for dropping by, BR.

[Pax]

I agree with our friend there (Gab)... those memories just overflows in your verse pretty friend. The life of the treasured memories lingers in your beautiful song...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Pax. Every person I met along the way has created a story, a song, a poem or a painting in my memories...

[nibhz]

beautiful piece of work, surely the reader can connect and the feel the memories you shared! lovely!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, nibhz.

[gabrielle]

I see this as a tribute to a relationship could be friendship or romantic. We may not be able to see those special individuals anymore but the beautiful memories would remain in our heart. As i've said in most of my reviews, rhyme in a poetry is something that i admire because i find it hard pen something with smooth rhyme and rhythm. In this case, your rhyme scheme is admirable. However, i am not quite sure on the last couplet. i read it loud and it seems that "here" and "remember" do not "jive". But this is just me. Other than that, this piece is wonderfully-penned, dhaye. =)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Hehe. Right, Gab. Just like what I always say, I'm a woman of flaws and I can never make a perfect piece...unless somebody would help me fix those slips. Actually, couplets 1, 5, 7 and 9 don't rhyme... but I'm trying to find the exact words to fix the rhyme issue.
Thank you so much for reminding me about it, Gab. Pag tinamad ang lola mo, minsan try din makalusot. Kaso matalas si "mata". Hehehe. Kailan mo papalitan yan ng mas astig? LOL

[gabrielle]

i could not find a picture that would perfectly fit my profile pic. LOL. welcome.

[lei]

ahhh memories.... they haunts our heart and soul! beautiful Kabayan.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Lei.

[Tom]

This friendship with a loved one no longer around, had an everlasting profound effect and you have immortalized this relationship through this soulful tribute of those happy times spent in each other's company!

A sweetly reflective, romantically penned write Dhaye!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks, Tom. You're too supportive, my friend.

[Tom]

One can never have enough support Dhaye but thank you anyway !