BLUE (Rhyme)

My response poem to Pax’s "I AM SO BLUE" http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/willyampax/1287451/

You always say you are so blue,

Do you hear what you say?
You're there alone, crying in vain

In the dirty ground where you lay

The missing piece, your precious one,

Is whom you always want
But have you tried to stay with her

Or it's only in a rant?

Pretension is your great pillow,

Your bed sheet is your lie
When you want to say a sweet "Hello"

You would always say "goodbye"

Now, who's wrong here, isn't it you,

Pretentious, lonely boy
You made your life with that color,

You played it like a toy?

If only you are strong enough

To say what's on your heart
Perhaps you'll not be blue, my dear,

For no hearts are apart...

Author's Note

Rhyme. A rhyming poem has the repetition of the same or similar sounds of two or more words, often at the end of the line.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"When you want to say a sweet "Hello" you would always say "goodbye"
I like the above lines a lot. I agree with the logic in your words. If you desire nothing. This is what you will receive. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you for the visit, CP.

[Lydia Shutter]

WOW, you really told it exactly the way you see it! Many people put up an appearance in their poetry...they claim to be the victim or the hero. In reality, things may be quite different from the words penned. Perhaps the person to whom you address your words needs to take a good long look in the mirror. You have led him there! Great work. Lydi**

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you, Lydi.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Wow, blue is the color of ice, in the poem his heart is cold and not able to express his kind emotions to the person that matters and spends his time programming himself about it.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the visit, Anika. :)

[Scott Metro]

A lovely sentiment here.
Do the people that inspire you ever come to read your response...just curious.
Another easy read for me.

Enjoyed it.
S.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I know they've read it because it's already posted as my review in their piece. And besides, they're not here right now.
Thank you, Scott.

[Scott Metro]

:)
Scott........