LOVE ME AGAIN   (Rondeau)

LOVE ME AGAIN (Rondeau)

A Chapter by Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
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A collaboration with Aethereal

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Love me again, I'll give my everything

Give me your heart, I’ll take the love you bring

We’ll set the world where we don’t see the past

We’ll sail the sea with our love’s stronger mast--

       We’ll feel the breeze like songs of love we sing.

 

So love me, dear and let our heartstrings cling

Through all our Winters, Summers on through Spring

So take my hand, you’re mine again at last!

       Love me again...


We’ll be as two doves flying wing to wing

To our celestial throne as queen and king

Where soft angelic clouds may off-broadcast

A love's that's deeper than the stars are vast

As vibrant harp strings mimic each heartstring

       Love me again…








© 2016 Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)


Author's Note

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
Rondeau

A Rondeau is a French form, 15 lines long, consisting of three stanzas: a quintet, a quatrain, and a sestet with a rhyme scheme as follows: aabba aabR aabbaR. Lines 9 and 15 are short - a refrain (R) consisting of a phrase taken from line one. The other lines are longer (but all of the same metrical length).


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Intriguing love poem! “Past” and “last” don’t rhyme with “dust“, “must“, and “lust“. The word “song” should be “songs” in line five. Line four is hard to understand.

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Aethereal

7 Years Ago

You still haven’t followed 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/10/1 ten syllable meter in your last two verses. You may .. read more
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Aethereal

7 Years Ago

This would be perfect if you added a sixth line to the last verse such as "a love much deeper than t.. read more



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It's really beautifull the flow is really god

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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Rose.
Intriguing love poem! “Past” and “last” don’t rhyme with “dust“, “must“, and “lust“. The word “song” should be “songs” in line five. Line four is hard to understand.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aethereal

7 Years Ago

You still haven’t followed 0/1/0/1/0/1/0/10/1 ten syllable meter in your last two verses. You may .. read more
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Aethereal

7 Years Ago

This would be perfect if you added a sixth line to the last verse such as "a love much deeper than t.. read more
A well executed piece of work (with music and picture.) 'No other feelings but the love we bring.' Well done.

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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, GAA.
Beautifully romantic! You've outdone yourself with this one, Daisie! Thank you for sharing!

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thanks, Michael. Rondeau is such a nice poetry form especially if you have chosen an effective refr.. read more
Oh so very romantic writing, I am mesmerized by your divine verses.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thank you!
I am learning from you everyday, Sis!


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Glad you learned something from my page. Thanks for the read, sis. =)
This poem is so sweet, I love it. :-) :-)

Kaze~

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Thank you, K. I'll go back to your page soon. =)
CrownedDevilx

7 Years Ago

Your very welcome. :-)
Once again, a nice learning experience, thank you, Dhaye.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

I'm the one who should thank you a lot. =)
Eddie Davis

7 Years Ago

Not at all, you have taught me the mechanics of poems, which is something we really didn't learn ver.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Ah, yes. In my Literature subject, we just studied about the life of the poet, the brief history and.. read more
My favorite love poem is Neruda's Sonnet XVII and the last line of this poem somehow reflects the concept in there. Thank you for sharing =)

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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

Ma-research nga yung sinasabi mong poem. Hehe.

That's my first attempt in writing a Ron.. read more
Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

7 Years Ago

I've read it. Modern sonnet pala sya. Ganda. =)

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