Girl In The Forest

Girl In The Forest

A Chapter by Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)
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For Picture Me 6 Contest. Thank You

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I am the girl in the forest, see me as a human 
Not the one that exits your lips, a dark cognomen
Despite my struggle to make you really see 
You stare at a dark and scary version which is not me

I hear the gloomy callings, oh, those mournful sounds 
Souls of those who are buried six feet below the ground 
In your cruel minds I am the criminal 
You cleave into my name the darkest pin of betrayal

On the surface you see this dark-colored creature 
In your eyes,  this is my only valid nature 
Does my truth not shine in the moonlight 
This forest comes alive to show me at your sight  

I am the girl in the forest, just a human like you  
Yet you choose not to see my essence that is true
Such truths you deny, I know your pretension
Darkness is your comfort even you fall short from conviction

So paint me your images, create me in lesser light 
I will not weep, mourn and succumb at your sight
The forest is my haven where I will live free 
Yes, free from what you need me to be





© 2016 Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)


Author's Note

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)
You might think my take on this photo deviates with what is really seen. The idea came when I downloaded it. "Girlintheforest" is actually the title or name of the photo.

Beauty is in the eye of the beholder.
In this cruel world, the critical society is a painter.

Cognomen: any name, especially a nickname

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i think the girl is the raven mourning for all of the lost souls...she seems to absorb all the sadness of all those who have gone before and are buried in the graveyard...

and yet with her keen eyes and heart, she realizes that there is finally peace in the darkness for those who reside.

wonderful atmosphere created here.

j.

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2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

3 Years Ago

I think your idea is great, sir. Thank you for the insghtful review.
Wicahpi Iyozaza

3 Years Ago

Exactly as I see it, Jacob. Nice review.



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Dhaye...
Very beautiful, superbly creative and stunningly captivating. Applause is in order! 👏

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

3 Years Ago

Thanks, Divya. :)
Hello Dhaye, thank you for entering the "Picture Poem This" contest. I have often used the Raven as a muse, or should I say used images with a Raven in it. They are smart creatures that mimic us and I do believe they carry souls on their backs. Anyways, the purpose of this contest is to write what comes to mind when you see/view an image. I think you fit that bill nicely with this presentation and I enjoyed reading the piece. Thank you for sharing your vision! Bravo

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Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind words, W.
An atmospherically dark, expressive write, better to come out of the woods and expose the hypocrite for what they really are ?

Cognitively & creatively penned poetry !

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Tom.
Interestingly worded and a wonderful write with many delights woven in.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

3 Years Ago

Thank you for the kind words, sir.
Perhaps the scene is the view of the girl's soul, or her condition. The poem hinted at the supernatural, something powerful yet subtle. Well done.

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Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

3 Years Ago

Thank you for giving your thoughts about it, Eddie.
i think the girl is the raven mourning for all of the lost souls...she seems to absorb all the sadness of all those who have gone before and are buried in the graveyard...

and yet with her keen eyes and heart, she realizes that there is finally peace in the darkness for those who reside.

wonderful atmosphere created here.

j.

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Daisie "Dhaye" Vergara (Daisie Partido)

3 Years Ago

I think your idea is great, sir. Thank you for the insghtful review.
Wicahpi Iyozaza

3 Years Ago

Exactly as I see it, Jacob. Nice review.

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