Going to a Wonderland

Going to a Wonderland

A Chapter by Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
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For a contest

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Lusty  pedal moves like it's excited to spin
My feet try to resist yet my legs feel the  need to win
Today is the day I will ignore the signs
I don't have to impress the kings in this lign
There were modern places I have been before
But this spotty one, looks like a different door
This seems like a way to a wonderful place
Birds singing everywhere fills the air with grace
Oh, I'm going to witness the wonder of this land
The moan of amazement inspires my untiring hands
I am not afraid if I fail or succeed
At least I have tried to find joy that I need.




© 2016 Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)


Author's Note

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)
The 10 given words:
P E D A L
S P O T T Y
I M P R E S S
N E E D
M O A N
F A I L
M O D E R N
B I R D S
L E G
I G N O R E


*There are some places that look so dangerous but lead to a paradise.

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to at least try to find the joy....probably the best we can do...i relate to this...always trying to look at the bright side of things...letting go of what ails me...and smiling...

odd array of words you were given, but somehow you wrote a very cohesive poem from them...you are quite creative my friend....

j.

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Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the motivating words, sir j.



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I have to agree with "There are some places that looks so dangerous but lead to a paradise" that is so true. That's when one must take a 'leap of faith' they say. As for the poem, nicely done. Nice use of the 10 words that were given. Bravo. Thank you for your entry and hope to see you next round!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for appreciating this poem.
Brilliance in this award-worthy piece...I marvel at your constant improvement over the years.
Wonderful accomplishment..Thanks for sharing

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thanks for the kind and motivating words.
This piece is very "summery" :). The combination of words and rhythm makes the reader feel joy. The only word that i feel misplaced is "moan" but of course you were able to smoothly incorporate it in the piece (I always associate moan to mourning but of course we also moan when we are delighted).

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thanks for reading and sharing here your insights, Gab.
Very clever use of the words given.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thank you.
to at least try to find the joy....probably the best we can do...i relate to this...always trying to look at the bright side of things...letting go of what ails me...and smiling...

odd array of words you were given, but somehow you wrote a very cohesive poem from them...you are quite creative my friend....

j.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the motivating words, sir j.
the discovery of new joy in new things. awareness and fulfillment of the heart's hidden desires - traveling to new places that open new doors for the traveler - there is refreshing hope and an adventurous spirit in this poem :)

best,
steph

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)

5 Years Ago

Thanks so much, Steph.
highonwords

5 Years Ago

you're welcome, ate dhaye :)

best,
steph

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