Going to a Wonderland

For a contest

Lusty  pedal moves like it's excited to spin

My feet try to resist yet my legs feel the  need to win

Today is the day I will ignore the signs

I don't have to impress the kings in this lign

There were modern places I have been before

But this spotty one, looks like a different door

This seems like a way to a wonderful place

Birds singing everywhere fills the air with grace

Oh, I'm going to witness the wonder of this land

The moan of amazement inspires my untiring hands

I am not afraid if I fail or succeed

At least I have tried to find joy that I need.

Author's Note

The 10 given words:
P E D A L
S P O T T Y
I M P R E S S
N E E D
M O A N
F A I L
M O D E R N
B I R D S
L E G
I G N O R E


*There are some places that look so dangerous but lead to a paradise.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

to at least try to find the joy....probably the best we can do...i relate to this...always trying to look at the bright side of things...letting go of what ails me...and smiling...

odd array of words you were given, but somehow you wrote a very cohesive poem from them...you are quite creative my friend....

j.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you so much for the motivating words, sir j.

[Wicahpi]

I have to agree with "There are some places that looks so dangerous but lead to a paradise" that is so true. That's when one must take a 'leap of faith' they say. As for the poem, nicely done. Nice use of the 10 words that were given. Bravo. Thank you for your entry and hope to see you next round!

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks a lot for appreciating this poem.

[Antoñyo]

Brilliance in this award-worthy piece...I marvel at your constant improvement over the years.
Wonderful accomplishment..Thanks for sharing

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for the kind and motivating words.

[gabrielle]

This piece is very "summery" :). The combination of words and rhythm makes the reader feel joy. The only word that i feel misplaced is "moan" but of course you were able to smoothly incorporate it in the piece (I always associate moan to mourning but of course we also moan when we are delighted).

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks for reading and sharing here your insights, Gab.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Very clever use of the words given.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thank you.

[highonwords]

the discovery of new joy in new things. awareness and fulfillment of the heart's hidden desires - traveling to new places that open new doors for the traveler - there is refreshing hope and an adventurous spirit in this poem :)

best,
steph

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Thanks so much, Steph.

[highonwords]

you're welcome, ate dhaye :)

best,
steph