Don't Ask, I'll Tell You Later

So, Daddy, do you love me? 

Did you care, even a smidge, 

as you leapt off the edge 

and left me on the cliff? 

Left me here, with nothing.

Nothing I could say. 

You know, you were my friends' hero. 

Where's your cape now? 

Was the escape worth the letdown?

What whispers in the wind 

were you listening to?

You're a viper,

You're a poison, 

But you're oh. So. Smooth. 

You.

You're not the one who

Made me way back when. 

Who were you then?

Did you mean to "grow up"

into this? 

Into this mess that just exists? 

Take my heart away from me

if you want.

Kill me off; do you feel the loss? 

I'm the one who's lost. 

I've not lost it all, 

Not even on the cliff 

where I watched you fall 

Into the endless, 

restless,

reckless sea. 

This edge where you knew it all...

except, you didn't know me.

So you fell into the waves

and left the break. 

You're somewhere in the tides,

tonight, somewhere in the sky, 

take a hit of moonshine

and see how the fire tastes. 

I bet it tastes great 

on your forked tongue. 

Take that fire 

and shove it down your lying lungs. 

So that's how I stand.

Back on that stupid edge, 

covered (buried?) In sand. 

Daddy, I have to ask....

Do you love me back? 

Reviews

[reeyce smythe wilder]

Wow. Reading this was...painful, mainly because I related to it on so many different levels. So true that it felt as though someone took a dull razor to my nerve endings...
Well done.

[trainwreck]

Thank you. I'm sorry you had to go through whatever it was to relate. :/ I hope this was a little release for you.

[Tribute To Jadey]

There is many raw emotions here...A bittersweet picture that has been painted.

[AlexValkyrie]

You have a really creative style of writing. Well done. I look forward to reading more of your pieces.

[trainwreck]

Thank you for your review! :) I'm glad you liked it.

[MandaBear]

I really liked it. You can really feel the raw emotions in this. Great job!

[trainwreck]

Thank you for your review!

[Jordan's Back]

Oh Wow, I really dont know how to express myself to this piece. but the Flow Rhythm and the content were deep concise and very penetrating. Excellent write

[SOUL LESS]

Really, I think you're being rather inconsiderate. Your father's just feeling the age. Make allowances. He always loves you. You owe it to him...to stick by him, even if he grows up a crosspatch. You were once seemingly a nuisance too. He made you all you are today.

Cheer up! You have someone many of us don't.

[laughinglullaby]

You made me cry...

[trainwreck]

awwww I'm sorry. :( I love you!

[laughinglullaby]

its k I love you too. you should give this to him

[trainwreck]

I'm not sure. we'll see. I'm not sure if it would be safe to that's why.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we need to know the truth. People who support to love us can break our heart showing little emotion and care. I like the many questions brought to life by the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[trainwreck]

thank you. :)