I wrote this in less than five minutes, so I'm not quite sure if it only makes sense to me.
Feel free to give feedback, actually, no, feedback is awesome! I encourage it. :)
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This is very good poetry. To be cornered and hide emotion would be a bad prison. A house that feel like a cell make the captive desire escape and no desire to return. A powerful poem. You create a emotion of be locked away and being controlled. I like the ending. A outstanding poem.
Coyote
It feels like that this " I " character has been misunderstood and has been labeled as crazy. But that could be just allegorical and it could rather mean being locked up when the key lies in the other's hands- in love , care and trust.. Good write...And these quick flowing poems often are subconscious flows..always keep em going..
Ouch, this poem hits pretty hard. I really like the stream of consciousness style, which is enhanced by the very short line structure, varied length of phrases, and great use of punctuation. The almost raggedly, broken rhythm gives it a very authentic feel, reflecting how the mind sputters with anger, sadness, and acceptance simultaneously here. Great ending. The finality and cynicism rings in the air when you have finished reading. This poem is rife with bitterness, but also with strength. You deliver your feelings in neat, defined slices which are easy for the reader to assimilate and identify with. I also like the way the poem builds to a climax with "are you justified?" which is, after all, the hub of the poem I think, and then winds down. The first half is hotter, passionate, and the second half is cooler, more disdainful. Very good transition showing the whole scale of emotions being experienced here. Really liked this! :-)
I liked this one but in some of your poems there is too much of whomever you are talking about. I think you should try to write about yourself a little to see how it all is put together. Something different for you.
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I love it, but I'm sure if there's a poem you wrote that i didn't like. Anyways, it makes sense. To me, one word sprung into my mind. The word was trapped.
I was texting you when you wrote this... I'm still texting you actually. But let's talk about this piece. Since you already told me what it's about I think my take on it may be different from other people. Reading this is like spinning around and seeing the world spin around you, trying to get a grasp on something, anything. Then again, maybe I'm totally off. Either way, love you.
-Cathrine
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