Lol Velocity

Lol Velocity

A Poem by trainwreck

I wish I was lightning.

I would be there in a flash

For you, and you wouldn't be alone.

You'd have to be strong so fast

To find a lightning bolt to hold.

 

I'm a spark, but I just can't keep

Myself together in this dark

And I'll come so close,

I can strike so deep...

But baby you can't come back for me.

 

I just need to let off some steam,

You could say you've been drawn to me,

You're so different, we match perfectly,

And I love your strength, and I adore

That you only fall in a perfect storm.

 

I'm all we need to be instant friends,

Take your crushed stone heart,

Make it perfect glass...

And touch you again

Just to watch you smash.

© 2011 trainwreck


Author's Note

trainwreck
Written for a contest, just for kicks. Please, tell me what you think.

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This is a cool poem its sure to win X)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Amazing. I love it. Hope you win.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice, intrigued me from the start and was flowing nicely :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Love your idea here..Fascinating..

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very cool!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love the title! The poem had some strong imagery in it and I like your rhymes/format a lot. Good work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice.
It hooked me from the start.
Excellent job with the imagery and detail.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I found this to be light heart and sweet.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I imagined a girl turning into lightning, it had me hooked from very start to the very end- a beautiful poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


it feels like you wrote it fast paced, and i like that, dont those always feel the most honest? could be wrong, well hey i'll be up for a while putting up my other writing, would gladly review back and forth if you wanted?

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on January 19, 2011
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