Nothing But This.

Time is slowly ticking away,

And Im left once more with nothing to say,

Im a young Taylor with a tone,

Stomping this heart till it turns to stone.

Baby I dont have time for this tonight.

 

When Im only seventeen,

I couldnt belive all Ive seen,

With the death of a dear friend

And the tears collected in my jar,

I wanted to light a cigarrette on the edge of his scar.

 

Ive never felt so weird,

When I saw my rain had cleared,

Theres nothing in this world to keep me down,

Nothing in the past to keep me un-loud,

Nothing left in the past but broken fingers,

Ive been through this s**t hundreds times before,

But it never failed to shake me to the core,

So give me some room to breathe.

 

From my broken dreams

To my broken heart,

Ive never failed to let you down,

But Ive never ever let you drown,

Through Bobby Joe and the radio,

We've gotten through his life-long burial.

 

And these ripples in time,

They mean nothing to me.

 

Ive never felt so weird,

When I saw my rain had cleared,

Theres nothing in this world to keep me down,

Nothing in the past to keep me un-loud,

Nothing in the past but broken fingers,

Ive been through this s**t hundred times before,

But it never failed to shake me to the core,

So give me some room to breathe.

 

Cigarrettes between my lips,

Alley bands under my feet,

The tunes I hear livens and dips,

I always wanted to be you.

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

Hannah if these are lyrics their awfully good. Lyrics or not your poetry is very melodius and would make fantastic songs.

Keep rockin it like a rockstar.

[JenLyn]

I loved it and I totally agree with Zeitgeist, the person in the poem seems troubled and wants help but at the same time they seem too strong to need it, they can make it on their own but the helplessness comes out again and it's like the person is almost screaming. Maybe they don't want help, they just want to figure out a way to lighten their load, without anyone intervening. Awesome write. Keep it up! :)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This poem is full of raw emotion. I felt like I was being restrained.
It made me feel really bad for this person. The tension you created
here made me feel like I was actually there. I've had some trouble
trying to figure this person out. The seem to really need someone to
intervene, but they have an incredible strength. They declare they
have been battle tested and still alive, but it almost sounds like a cry
for help. The range of emotions in this piece make it interesting.
A debatable poem is a classic poem. This would make a great song.
The lyrics would have the same effect on a minor or major composition.
That's quite rare.