The Good Eye

It was that one eye of yours that thrilled me so

A brown so deep I could see the origination of the big bang

Not that your other eye wasn't beautiful, it sparkled

But, at night I think of the good eye I and shudder with delight

If you were a pirate, you could cover the good eye

And if you fell in love, remove the patch before making love the first time

Oh how that would spoil your lover, how he would stare

The two of you would ride the light, never noticing the stars

Unless they reflected in the good eye

Reviews

[Kay/Hayden]

In the line you mention ed big bang all I could think about is the tv show.. Their cringey voices. Great piece of writing.
"Do not go where the path may lead, go instead where there is no path and leave a trail." -Ralph Waldo Emerson

-Kay

[barleygirl]

This is the height of imagination. I am so jealous of you & other writers who write totally off the wall & do it in a way that's so convincing, we overlook the audacity and get sucked right in. For years I had a young friend in Pakistan with a glass eye & it's hard not to mentally note the difference. If only people could be this open & accepting about our parts that are not fitting the mold, as if it's a delightful aberration with ups & downs. This is a poem, not just of tolerance . . . but to encourage us to have fun with our quirks & love other people for their differences, not just enduring them despite! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Crowley]

Ha! thanks Margie...sorry been gone for a bit. One of my little what ifs here, I had heard the Elvis line in my head, "I looked her square in the eye because that's all she had was one big square eye" and it was off o the races. Looking forward to getting back and reading some and hopefully writing something that doesn't resemble dog s**t so much. Love ya!!

[light and ashes]

Hmmmm.... interesting. I was drawn to this because I have brown eyes and only recently have started to like them. Does she have two different color eyes?

[Crowley]

I really don't know...lol. I love me some brown eyes. Thanks so much for the review, It is greatly appreciated. sorry so late in the reply!!

[light and ashes]

It's fine! You're welcome!

[Saoirse K.]

you had me at big bang
and held me til the stars reflected back
i'm a sucker for the cosmic
what can i say
this is awesome though
not contrived
but simple, honest, and imaginative
like the image of this enigmatic pirate
shrouding a beautiful eye
saving it to reflect the cosmos for her lover
they say if you have it flaunt it
and yet here you have her going the other way
i love that
and the idea of duality
like a perfect half
a perfect eye
the other is just ok
sweet little write
nicely done

[Crowley]

2 months ago!!! Damn have I been gone that long. so sorry for the late reply. thanks you so much for the review. I am a sucker for eyes and hair...especially wet hair. TMI I know. But we all have our hang ups. Hoping to get back to reviewing and writing here now that my mind has started thinking in that vein again. Sometimes I just can't write a thang!!!

[kentuck14]

Like the eye on the dollar bill . . . . love is one good eye looking into another one good eye . . . love dies when we open both eyes and see each other as only human. Interesting piece, C
T

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahme..]

Very good, the eyes and mind are something that one could write forever about.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

reading this again, after talking to you about the Beats...i thought of Robert Creeley with his patch...and one good eye...
but his heart had two good eyes with which to write his poetry...
"pain is a flower
like that one
like this one
like that one
like this one..."

[Crowley]

Lol...I totally forgot about that!!! I love it!!!

[Lorry]

Ah, those moments that we can be stunned into silent awe, even at the memory of seeing the depth of that one's orb, like a gateway to their mind and soul.
So elegantly stated Sir, that must have been some set of peepers she had. 😀

[R.E. Ray]

I think the good eye is the one that favors us (more than we might favor it). It's the one closest to us, the one we see most clearly on the pillow next to us. Brown eyes are so unrated. I find natural beauty in the brown, maybe the origination of life or love.

Still untangling this one in my mind, but I can hear this conversation... well, probably a silent monologue, as the imagination fills in the darkness. :)

[Crowley]

That’s a really good thought. Still untangling it in my mind as well. Thanks so much for the review!!!

[R.E. Ray]

You're welcome, sir. My pleasure.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Eye contact, a power unto itself. It magnifies emotions and expisss the soul.

[Crowley]

Oh how I love those eyes!!! You have the right of it!!! Thank you!