my only two sentences

I wish you would treat me better

I would've want you in my life

I almost loved you, its a good thing I didn't

the only feeling you have was pure hatred

you treated my family like crap

you never cared about my illness or fever

I will make you pay for the things you done to me

alll you want to do is ruin our family and be a jerk

my heart is better without you, it will always be

never in my life will I call you "father" 

 

Author's Note

I know that this is a short poem, but I tried my best to come up with a poem. This is a poem for a jerk (cough) *sshole '(cough) that lived in my life 6 years ago.
Any reviews?

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

My dad had the same issue with HIS dad (I don't think he saw or heard tell of him past age six) so I totally understand where you're coming from here...he was a stronger person because of it though...and I'm sure it will have the same effect on you though you're already a great writer so it probably already has :) 100^^

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Thanks ^_^

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[Japanese Cherry]

this was sad... but you did well... good job

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Thanks ^_^

[Love Demon]

I feel like punching that jerk in the eye >_<
I like this poem, but still i feel like beating him up :P
Great job :)

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You can go ahead and beat him up, I dont really care XD
Thanks for reading :3

[Baby Ricochet]

It saddens me when young men don't have a strong positive masculine role model in their lives. Why some grown men treat they're own children so badly I'll never know. It's a problem as old as time itself. Great poem. Lots of feeling behind it. High marks indeed

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Thanks ^_^

[Sam]

Wow, just wow. Thought this is sad, it's also an amazing poem, wish I had the guts to say something like this to my dad. Well done, good job :)

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Thanks ^_^

[Sam]

No problem :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

So sad and raw! I can just imagine someone screaming it to this person whol lost the privilege of being called father. Such a passionate, great poem. Well done!
God bless
100:)

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Thank you so much ^_^

[Lost in Wonderland]

No problem at all:)