ode to a drunk

wonder where the time has gone

when was it last the bright sun shone

heart is heavy ,torn crushed

just the way you left and rushed

 

words of anger and words of pain

making sure never again

twisted minds and love all dead

looking at the future dread

 

climb back up and look ahead

turmoil gone was in your head

you hurt the ones around so bad

now your gone we are really glad

 

unforgiven running scared

after all our love you shared

im taking a moment to let it out

no more abuse no scream no shout

 

dont know what you were doing

games of you coming and going

its over with at long loast

you are now in the past

 

time moves on and lives do change

promises of marriage or engage

are these lies like all the rest

you say an aweful lot in jest

 

mind all blown and heart all broke

really felt your hands and choke

the heart it tore and on the floor

a mad man walks out of the door

 

wonder where the good man went

just for you our hearts we lent

only to be ruined bad

you walked right out and left us sad

 

time moves on and we have healed

you live your life and lies all realed

we dont have to listen now

you were one evil cow

 

dont forget us if you dare

we will pass you head in air

smiling at a very sad man

cos you did just all you can

 

now the days we smile and more

so very glad you took the door

walked straight out and didnt look back

now our heart is not too black

 

good things will come to us once more

now you turned and went through door

dont come back although we care

your drunken mood we no longer share

 

good speed good health and all that stuff

we are happy cos we had enough

goodbye cheerio and off you go

we will never again sink so low.

Reviews

[Cicera]

Despite all the negativity that he left behind, when he left, this man seems to have been cared for in troth. Solemn vows come out easily and faster than the boozed breath when the head is soft. Drunk people lend hope to others and to themselves, because liquor speaks a sweet language. It is not because they are bitter people that in the following morning they forget.

Drunk people give sorrow to the loved ones, not because their love becomes less. But where do the lies and all that pain go when the door opens, out goes the drunk but does not close the door behind? It is not easy to forget, especially if all the while, while all this and that happened, you were just awake.

[Kim]

My Goodness this is one powerful write,
I really like the thoughts that you put into this.
Wonderful Rhyme scheme and flow.
Amazing job!