Walking across water

 

 

 

 

 

You are a mortal with an immortal's soul

 

listening...        

 

 

to the platonic voices of reasoning

 

owning a conscience that filled you with clarity  

 

confident hands that divided the seasons

 

composing...       

 

words of symmetry and curiosity

 

revealing your awesome beauty and mystery    

 

your two feet barely touched the dirt of the earth

 

you preferred...       

 

to walk across water or walking on air

 

gravity seemed to move your energy elsewhere  

 

the cosmos gifted you with a gratis life

 

you knew not...       

 

how lucky you were and how lucky you was

 

to be weightless and do whatever just because

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

This reminds me of someone so close to heart and then so out of reach. Almost like a lover never touched. Of course I relate everything to my life because I'm selfish that way lol... but honestly it touched that part of me, that waits on the other side.. with arms wrapped around my knees and simply silent...xo "breathe me"... sigh

[Muse]

I was moved writing this...the pic of the bridge...felt like an invitation to cross over.

[Lily Mae]

That's what I loved about it. The clarity is there to cross and the fog doesn't seem to be foreboding but more inviting.. like it's just mean't to be..

[Lily Mae]

Plus up above in the clouds the darkended area looks like two lovers..x

[Muse]

I know where your mind it sweetie...I hope he will breathe the same air as you someday.

[Kingsley M. U. Obike]

This is impressive. The tune suits the atmosphere of the verse. I like it.

[Horselvvr]

Wow i really like this!

[Elissa-Melody]

Very good!!!

[Nautili]

this is a mystical write....I really liked your view of this person. Some people just resonate an "other-worldliness" so I know how you feel, I just never thought to write about it. It also could be written with Christ in mind, when he was in mortal form. I could see Mary Magdalene writing such a poem!

[Kenneth The Poet]

I like this. It's a perfect dedication to the best of friends I think.

[Muse]

OF COURSE! :p

[dawn aulis]

Very moving, it could have been taken many ways, it made me stop and think about life, love and eternity. Beautiful pic that helps tell the story

[Empirik]

Oh this is very interesting, at first I was taken by the awareness of this soul and then I felt as if I was a mature adolescent because that has been the only time when I could and did whatever I wanted just because. Then after reading it again I found a congruence that is blessed by the universe, which allows more insight and freedom to occur between souls. Especially when they are together. I cant help but think of a long distance relationship that is about to finally loose the distance and strive as desire wants in the bees hive. So honey flows and well as work goes to be rich in the ways of the soul. Lovely write! :)

[Michael X]

systematic decisiveness, your words reflect commitment for the greater interest and pays homage to ethereal happenstance without repentance, beautifully envisioned, I like this a lot!

[. : r E L I E V E : . ..]

lovely almost awe inspiring to give up my life and toss myself off that bridge
I've lived a good life
Not perfect until now

That it your poem, that it is importance .....

[Androglossia]

Beauty and happiness came to mind when reading your poem. Beauty means different things to different people, as well as happiness. While some are chasing their youth because they want to hang on with their beauty, many of us chase happiness and the beauty it brings, the quality that gives pleasure to the mind or senses. A very refreshing write, Muse.