Walking across water

 

 

 

 

 

You are a mortal with an immortal's soul

 

listening...        

 

 

to the platonic voices of reasoning

 

owning a conscience that filled you with clarity  

 

confident hands that divided the seasons

 

composing...       

 

words of symmetry and curiosity

 

revealing your awesome beauty and mystery    

 

your two feet barely touched the dirt of the earth

 

you preferred...       

 

to walk across water or walking on air

 

gravity seemed to move your energy elsewhere  

 

the cosmos gifted you with a gratis life

 

you knew not...       

 

how lucky you were and how lucky you was

 

to be weightless and do whatever just because

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

This reminds me of someone so close to heart and then so out of reach. Almost like a lover never touched. Of course I relate everything to my life because I'm selfish that way lol... but honestly it touched that part of me, that waits on the other side.. with arms wrapped around my knees and simply silent...xo "breathe me"... sigh

[Muse]

I was moved writing this...the pic of the bridge...felt like an invitation to cross over.

[Lily Mae]

That's what I loved about it. The clarity is there to cross and the fog doesn't seem to be foreboding but more inviting.. like it's just mean't to be..

[Lily Mae]

Plus up above in the clouds the darkended area looks like two lovers..x

[Muse]

I know where your mind it sweetie...I hope he will breathe the same air as you someday.

[Amazed]

I loved reading this piece. The way the words flowed like the water He/she walks across.
Great write Muse as always.

[MOON]

Simply lyrical , this write has that elusive feel to it . Like something within your grasp yet unable to hold onto . Lovely imagery deep yet light in execution. Beautiful.

[Dayran]

Your poem reads to a part of the passions that has not been born but walked the earth in a miracle of nature's creation to help man get started. Its a poem that ought to touch everyone who reads it, more so the very neighbours who share your inspirations.

It intimates the possibility that it will be in the flesh someday. It persuades man to take up the cause. Nature always does something for a reason. Well done Muse and tks.

[Pax]

it flows smoothly as the earth beneath my feet or the air gushing across me or the sudden burst of water i walk upon, i felt the flight of your words as if gravity lifts your emotions. Well done my friend!

[AJ Kristiansen]

Beautiful, there's a dream-like quality about this... other-worldliness.... something we all want to grasp while still in these mortal bodies... you've touched these qualities in your words and the images you've created. The music and image add to it all.... thank you again for such beauty.. and wonder.... xxxx

[N!LoC]

i cant really decipher this one... a lil help please?

[KeeD]

The picture, the song, the poem.. it's like a touch of beauty.. it's like a little piece of heaven. The most stand out factor in this poem is the flow.. It's amazing. Reciting the words out loud makes this poem feel like gravity but then there's the meaning the words.. makes you feel like your floating in space.. a calmness .. like you're walking on water. Solace in your words. Thank you for uploading, Favorited.

[Muse]

I told someone earlier that I'm a rule breaker...I don't like to play with traditional syllable count and rhyme. So this time...like I've done a few times before....I created my own structure. There is a method to my madness...every four lines follow the cyllable count from before...every third and fourth finds a rhyme. I know it works...when it reads like a song. Thank you. :))

[KeeD]

I respect that poetry has rules, but art can never be restricted by rules, it isn't expressive then.. it isn't what it's meant to be, in my case it isn't me. So yeah I totally get what you mean and I love the way you've written this.

[Muse]

boundaries restrict creativity. :)

[Art]

Immortal...this word generates the elusiveness of thoughts within Universal skies, created with the musical background of escape...one could be the thought itself, or one could find that the escape is into the imaginative adventure each word and thought you have given us to fly away...with you

nicely written piece Muse...

[Muse]

Glad I could share a more "light" hearted inspiration with you. Your god-given talents I feel is gifted upon us all..I wanted to return the favor.

[Art]

I knew there was some Light way down deep within ya...you my friend are gifted as well..

[Art]

and the music...Divine

[Muse]

I know you like sharing music too..I was conflicted on this...but I settled on this well known tune...I think it works well. :))

[Art]

makes for a very enjoyable read...

[Muse]

I first shared the song with words...but the spoken words..with my words...I foresaw conflict.

[Art]

just a note...each one of my poems is written first and then I go through a select the music after...but on another note...I have heard some music which inspires me to go write...either way it is a bit different, but I feel this is my own way of expressing that which needs to be...

[Muse]

AGREED. :)

[Art]

;)

[captain]

I love the tone of mystery in this piece as if I'm floating walking without gravity, seems so mystical. This is great!

[Muse]

mystical?

YES...I was even googling the word mystical to find a pic to accompany my words. Thank you!

[captain]

i was about to say magical, but then its has more mystical effects on me. I like it very much and your most welcome.

[Tate Morgan]

I love the picture. The poem was surreal I felt a floating feeling reading it. A great soul resides in you.Upon your shoulders will rest the hopes and dreams of many

[Muse]

A loving family....beautiful friends like you...brought me here...I just wanted to share a breath of fresh air.