Walking across water

 

 

 

 

 

You are a mortal with an immortal's soul

 

listening...        

 

 

to the platonic voices of reasoning

 

owning a conscience that filled you with clarity  

 

confident hands that divided the seasons

 

composing...       

 

words of symmetry and curiosity

 

revealing your awesome beauty and mystery    

 

your two feet barely touched the dirt of the earth

 

you preferred...       

 

to walk across water or walking on air

 

gravity seemed to move your energy elsewhere  

 

the cosmos gifted you with a gratis life

 

you knew not...       

 

how lucky you were and how lucky you was

 

to be weightless and do whatever just because

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lily Mae]

This reminds me of someone so close to heart and then so out of reach. Almost like a lover never touched. Of course I relate everything to my life because I'm selfish that way lol... but honestly it touched that part of me, that waits on the other side.. with arms wrapped around my knees and simply silent...xo "breathe me"... sigh

[Muse]

I was moved writing this...the pic of the bridge...felt like an invitation to cross over.

[Lily Mae]

That's what I loved about it. The clarity is there to cross and the fog doesn't seem to be foreboding but more inviting.. like it's just mean't to be..

[Lily Mae]

Plus up above in the clouds the darkended area looks like two lovers..x

[Muse]

I know where your mind it sweetie...I hope he will breathe the same air as you someday.

[writing mojo]

such a lovely airy feeling, and the music adds even more to your mystery, may the "you" and "your" of this piece be forever blessed by your word choice..

[Muse]

I want others to feel blessed...

[writing mojo]

that's a quality not many are aware of to even suggest, good for you and your souled poems

[Muse]

I hope these writings will inspire me too...to not be so damn moody.

[writing mojo]

right on to that....it's my birth sign this time of themouth, so s**t better start getting a little less wavy and more calmer :)

[Muse]

that time of the month...sorry to hear that. lol

[writing mojo]

lol yeah it's my Aquarian period, blue wooo!

[Muse]

I don't have any advice..best to maybe stay out of the water with the rest of us. @@

[writing mojo]

that's tough when your body is 65% made of it...lol

[Muse]

here's a glass of water then. geesh

[Frieda P]

Sounds like an idol, you had me with Sia....I adore her talent. I languished in this read for a while, you had me stoked, it's peaceful here...

[Muse]

we all have idol inspiration...some idol life...for others it's an enigmatic mystery.

[Frieda P]

You've captured the entirely of life in those words, yes. I find myself in that last category, almost always....

[Muse]

It's that mystery...confusion.... that makes life so damn amusing.

[Frieda P]

ha yes 'amusing' is one way to put it...love your sense of humor!

[Muse]

I might rename myself someday..Muse..to Amused.

[Frieda P]

Amuse'd

[Frieda P]

Had to read this one again, it just gets better each time....

[luviva]

this just induces that feeling of someone sitting by the water side.. u knw
you suddenly fill filled ith all th powers of life and it feels like a new you.you portrayed that feeling very well in this poem!!
nioce read and write my dear..
thanxx for sharing!.

[Muse]

Dip your toes in.....

[s y e]

Woweeee! I really liked this. It was an excellent write. Well done.
Loved the picture too!

[Muse]

:D

[s y e]

:-)

[.]

~ oh, this is epic work... reminds me of one of my favourite books... it's called "the unbearable lightness of being"... and is written by milan kundera... the sense of flight in this piece is absolutely stunning... it would be amazing to live life with so much depth yet lightness... this is the magnificence of a profound consciousness... ~ awe-inspiring work, beth... immensely inspiring... it's like an ode to poetry and the beauty of life...

[Muse]

I want to take my shoes off....and be weightless too....

[.]

~ it'll happen... you're almost there... and i'm right behind you... :)

[Muse]

did I tell you this is a swinging bridge? :D

[.]

~ i can tell... have been on one here in india... and i love the dire straits classic... with that line... "we're the sultans of swing"... :P

[Muse]

you do dire straits? I would never have guessed!

[.]

~ we all have our secrets... that eventually reveal themselves... :P

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Some people just do not appreciate or utilize their talents and therefore miss out on opportunities within their grasp. That is what I take from the poem.

Great to see you writing again.

[Muse]

my writings have become far and few in between...and I'm trying to lighten the mood a little.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

Well you certainly did that.. it is a very enjoyable read.

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I really enjoyed the pure potential and open-possibility of this, also the phrasing really appealed to my ear.

[Muse]

experimented with syllable count and took lines from some other poems I started...but could never finish...same inspiration I guess...so it became easy to mold it all into one emotion. Thank you.

[lee von cleef]

Why not? Just Because...... "Breath Me" smooth smooth smooth,no edge to catch just smooth....

[Muse]

I wanted it to be close your eyes smooth...meditation...not just poetry.

[lee von cleef]

poetry and art poetry and passion poetry and craft will the moment float as your poem does...
I think it is.... Why not? a great way to live.

[Muse]

lets float then....

:)

[Antonio Valentino]

I love this..

you're absolutely incredible Musey

and the picture is totally amazing as well

this will always be one of my all time favorites

written by one of the most special people i know


wondiefull

[Muse]

Wanted to thank you the other day for the lengthy and revealing review. I think some people...including myself take for granted the beauty that we possess. You included my friend. It fills me with wonder....sadness. Some days I want to walk on water...be weightless...careless...but the weight of reality always keeps me awake and ready.

[Antonio Valentino]

im walking out to the middle of the pond and hoping you will meet me halfway.. i have a hug for you.. if we sink after, so be it.. we'll become the gentle ripples that lap the shore in silence..

[Muse]

How about all of us on the cafe go for a swim..who cares if someone can't swim...I have life jackets for everyone. :)

[Antonio Valentino]

yeah why not.. first let me change that silent ripple part to becoming loud, frantic, splashing, and screaming!! hahaha

make sure me and you get the first two life jackets okay lol! :D

[Muse]

oops...I forgot to put air in yours...ha ha ha

[Antonio Valentino]

he.. lp ... .. gasp.. . wat? gurgle.. gurgle haha

[Muse]

I don't know CPR. So you are really in trouble!