Blinded

Just like the sun

your smile so bright

find me

illuminate my night.

 

Overwhelmed I am

just a shadow, no touch

this empty void

at times is just too much.

 

Like the sun

penetrate me with life

rescue me

from the internal hate

this strife.

 

Blinded by my darkness!

 

Blinded by my

evil deeds!

 

Blinded by my

sinful needs!

 

Like the sun

your smile so bright

cure my darkness

blind me

with your light!

Reviews

[Neville]

Well I could not put it better myself ---- I mean the positive views and opinions of so many of my reviewing predecessors ... I love your "Blinded by my
evil deeds!

Blinded by my
sinful needs!

Crammed full and overflowing with subliminally erotic messages that tantalise and tease. A real treat at breakfast time. Shame that I have to set off for the gym, but I will be back. AGT's N

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh oh get out your pepper spray. I am back. Saw this in the feed and had to click. Blinded by your darkness perhaps? At once sensual mysterious and hopeful, a read to revisit.

[J. Land]

You say so much with so few words. Few have the depth of honesty found here. Greatness.

[K.J. Bryen]

A positive message, with a dark and erotic feel. Really, really great. Bravo :)

[Damien Thibodeaux]

I don't believe I read the previous version of this, so I'll have to check it out. However, this is a perfect example of why I fell in love with your art. "...penetrate me with life / rescue me from the internal hate... Blinded by darkness..evil deeds..sinful needs..." Your words always stir something deep inside when I read your poetry.

[Silent Serenity also kn..]

Dark yet with a positive light....loved how this piece flowed and you guided each word beautiful together....thank you for sharing Muse

[Grimesy]

We all go through good times and bad times. Alot of people write about one or the other. But I love the way your poem captured both emotions, the positive and negative. It is so real. I love it. Thank you.

[Vria P Crow]

FIRST IMPRESSION

1. The rhyme is excellent! Rhyme is not always successful in a serious poem because of the STRUCTURE.

2, The picture really caught my attention for obvious reasons. The drawing is intricate; it is lovely and artistic rather than pornographic.

??? Do you do the artwork for the poetry or are you co partners with someone?

3. Blinded by beauty. I love the thematic aspects of the poem.

PLAYING WITH POETRY

blinded by beauty;
lies and truth

Lies are ugly.
Truth is beautiful.

Lies are beautiful illusions.
Truths are ugly documentaries.

FAVORITE QUOTE

The third stanza is my favorite because of its authentic perception. The word choice, "penetrate me with life" is a prime example. It could relate to sex as the literal interpretation. However, it could also be perceived as nature. Nature "breathes" life back into humanity whether we are naturalists or industrialists.

CONCLUSION

Primarily, I enjoyed the premise. I felt it was a general approach to the perception of beauty. The simplicity is what makes it an attraction. It allows the reader to decide for themselves what beauty is.

love,
ria

[SyberRose]

I enjoyed your words Muse and I liked your form too... and the bold sentences also.
Nicely done.

SyberRose

[David Scott]

The light is often very blinding... Sometimes a blessing and sometimes a prelude to destruction. Light is Truth. I went beyond the happy joy of lovers. This poem spoke volumes to me!
Be well dear Muse :-)