Black Widow

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

      

  

 

 

 Masculine hands, with muscular limbs

 

                        tongue tied and beautifully hung, you  

 

                            fell victim to my selfish bliss, finally

 

                   trapped by my love that was woven and spun, I

 

         caught you within my web of silkened sheets

 

              held in bondage to be my dessert, your

 

                         martyred lips are mine alone to unravel, I'll

 

                         kiss it all better, never mind it might hurt

 

                                each gasp for breath shows your unrest

                    

                sorry my love for the tangled up mess

 

                            your chest cocooned within my embrace, its

 

                              pointless to fight the blackwidows fate, 

 

                    I'll eat you up slow.....

 

                  starting first, with your sweet decadent face.

 

Reviews

[EMF]

I have nothing against a little B&D. Even a little S&M. Willing to explore many other letters too, but this takes it to such a wonderfully new level... Oh. Yes. Sorry, I'm back and not behaving any more. You have created here a true lure, that keeps mine eye's returning again and again. Partly because of the sheer quality of it. The texture of the language has a silken sensuality and sexuality of it that holds you. And frankly, I'm turned on something rotten by it. As I said befoer..... way down to the marrow

[Odayin]

You have some crazy symbolism going on here. I love your deeper meaning, but I think it's so deep that no one will see it the same...which, of course, makes it all the better!
This is one of the most interesting poems i've ever read on this site and its just mind-blowing to think of the creation process and the inspiration source.
Be proud...you have amazed me. Wonderful job

[SkinlessFrank]

yeah...i suppose there is an ethical cannibalism

[Muse]

ha ha ha...agreed. I think I saw the waiver for this. Laughs...

[Muse]

Wow, sister....

As I read this so many times, but each new time, I see more more and more...

"I'll

kiss it all better, never mind it might hurt

each gasp for breath shows your unrest "

Such a blissful poison of one of the most intelligent black widows poison...
And then the ending, perrr-fect. To start with the face, is the human aspect, in the animals core... lions break necks first... :D chilling and amazing grrrrr... :D

E.L.

[Muse]

I thought about cannibalism when I wrote this. To want somebody so badly...you could eat them alive. I could only think about two creatures that actually did this. The preying mantis...and the black widow. They are some of the most powerful females on this planet! :P

Oooh yes. I know the feeling. Then you even can imagine how the flesh out of the bone taste ;) lol. Yep you're right. Those two are cruel and brilliant. Oh you forgot the "succubus" however I wonder if she is into it... more other occult stuff :D xo

[Muse]

lol yes...I wrote about succubus too. She's a feisty one.

Lol haha, yep.... :

" 1896, American, feist (“small, aggressive dog”) +‎ -y;[1] the term feist (now rare) itself originally meant “stink”, and earlier “fart”, from Middle English, from Old English, from Proto-Germanic, presumably from Proto-Indo-European – see feist for details. " LOL =) I see much agreements now ha! love it!!!

[Muse]

omg I never new feisty had such a stinky past. And to think...I thought the word was somewhat sexy. Now its just a really bad fart waiting to bite the nose off her ex-lover. ha ha ha

LOL i did not knew too ha! now we learn... omg. The word is freaking sexy though. Like dervish, or fetish. Haha lol... yours or mine? lol my Italian ex is just living his peaceful Napolitan lifestyle. He had a big nose though. lol (all Italians have) even Pinocchio... OMG I laugh my a*s off, litteraly, it just walked away in my living room... :D I thought feisty was just the female develette... as she is. But language keeps amazing me always... xo

[Kristallo]

Stunning write. This is so darkly sensual and domineering, and the way that you laid out the text really adds to the velvety sexuality of it. "Martyred lips are mine alone to unravel, i'll kiss it all better, never mind it might hurt." Very nice. Raw and decadent and brimming with erotic prowess.

[The Analog Kid]

The imagery and symbolism are top notch. Your layouts have such impact on the reader.

[ba_mcfarlane]

This is quite the entertaining read! Sly humour puts light and focus upon a piece that would have been trapped in a tryst story all serious and gloomy. Sex is fun, no rule against smiling and laughing when coitally engaged. Bravo.

[zainul]

You reversed the thought of a lewd male about enjoying sex in sadist manners.
Very well done as reflected by numerous commendable reviews.

[Muse]

lol...well even the purist minds can have sadistic thoughts..lol

[zainul]

I agree.
I may find the appropriate word to match my feelings.
You can also help if you can relate.

[SkinlessFrank]

i also marvel at "where we go" when we make love....it is not of this place and time, but where is it exactly....like dreaming, so hard to remember once we fall back to earth...and so nice that we can become an "other"

[Muse]

Agreed...

it can be sweet...or cannibalistic in nature. The black widow really is a beauty...her bite only hurts for a short bit. lol

[Polaroid Impossible]

This is one of the best poems I have ever read. A metaphorically dark read, intertwined in such a seductive and sexualised manner.

Love the use of colour in this piece also. Red and black - a match made in heaven. The text format evokes feeling as well as the flawless writing.

Perhaps you could write a series of metaphorical poems? Thank you for the read!

[Muse]

Most of my writes are highly metaphorical...yes I am working on a collection to publish...titled..Just an Aftertaste.........

[Polaroid Impossible]

Fantastic. Let me know when it has been published and where I can buy a copy