you said forever

you said forever

but look at us now

all upset and mad 

cause of 1 wrong move 

i tried to apolagise 

but you just looked the other way

and said goodbye for the final time

as i lookk back on us now 

i see the mistake

and i realized it was not that bad 

i wanted to take you back

but forever ened a while ago

Reviews

[TheAdventOf]

Aside from a few spelling errors, this is fantastic! I know the feeling of getting left behind by someone you thought you loved, and it really sucks... but hey, life goes on, right? You captured the emotion really well in here, just needs some minor cleanups (basically what Khaotic said)! Keep it up though!

[Khaotic Katastrophe]

this is good, really good, honestly. Though, look for misspelled words and extra words that throw off the flow. Keep up the good work :)