WARMTH

WARMTH

A Poem by hcarson
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ACROSTIC ATTEMPT 1

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WARMTH
WARMTH FILLS MY BODY
A HEAT INVADING EVERY VESSEL
REVOLVING AROUND MY HEART
MELTING THE ICE LONG FORMED THERE
THAWING, I FEEL IT DRIPPING AWAY
HEALING MY HURT, DISSOLVING MY PAIN.

© 2016 hcarson


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This poem is descriptive in a way that the reader can understand readily. Because of its simple message there is still opportunity to slim it down just a little. of the second line. Then in third line"It revolves" Remove the in fourth line. Last line Healing this hurt. I don't know what you think but your poem is so lovely. Wish I would of written it! Blessings Kathy

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

3 Years Ago

Thank u kathy for such lovely review much appreciated



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So full of feeling here, And nicely expressed.

Posted 1 Year Ago


The best cure for a broken heart begins in a smile even if that smile is born within the pleasant thoughts of the revenge you shall soon reap upon that one who hurt you so ...

Posted 3 Years Ago


I like how you took a physical feeling instead of an emotion to run through the body. Most people would say Love but you introduced Warmth! I would like to read more like these. Awesome!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

3 Years Ago

Thank u...not been here for a long time so not sure how late my response is haha
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mou
it is very sweet yet very deep in meaning..I too like to express the thought in such a beautiful way where words are less and meaning is vast..since from a long I was absent from wc but again feel really good to join here..and I love it :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

3 Years Ago

Thank u mou, i have also been absent and hooe to get back to writing, thank u for lovely review
This poem is descriptive in a way that the reader can understand readily. Because of its simple message there is still opportunity to slim it down just a little. of the second line. Then in third line"It revolves" Remove the in fourth line. Last line Healing this hurt. I don't know what you think but your poem is so lovely. Wish I would of written it! Blessings Kathy

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

3 Years Ago

Thank u kathy for such lovely review much appreciated
Who will criticize such a lovely piece...it's just awesome...and good to read that you have 5 angles in your sweet house...I wish you and your family always stayss together...I too want a big big family and also a pet...somewhere you've became an inspiration of mine..truely said...I feel this ..

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

4 Years Ago

Hi, thank you so much for your lovely review, i really appreciate it 😊. It is certainly fun havi.. read more
horizon

4 Years Ago

wow after listening to you..i think its great fun having a big family..i am more than prepared..but .. read more
hcarson

4 Years Ago

Thank you, it can be testing at times but we get there in the end haha
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hi
now this poem kinda went slow, like it was not as good as it could have been,
to me a little more detail could have made it good, but i still like it

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

4 Years Ago

It was my first atempt at an acrostic poem so i was concentrsting on trying to end where i could sta.. read more
It can be relatable to any reader Helen, such a well presented subject and you have captured the meaning of the word very deeply... A lovely attempt at acrostic...

Dhiman))

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

4 Years Ago

Thank u dhiman 😊
I love an acrostic that isn't immediately apparent!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

4 Years Ago

Thank you s.mi....your comments invaluable as always 😀

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hcarson
hcarson

cardiff, barry, United Kingdom



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