broken girl

broken girl

A Poem by child of God
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This poam is about What my mothers brother made me I hate him

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Look at me... What have you done to
my life with your dirty hands?
You took my childhood and threw it away,
you did things to me that I will never forget,
now I'm forever a broken girl.
I was just a child, I didn't deserve that.
I used to be outgoing but now
look at what you have done to me...



© 2014 child of God


Author's Note

child of God
This was the first poam I ever wrote

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Few words, and let it paints an image. What I like about this poem is that you don't give much detail-you leave the reader wondering what you are not only referring to but also it allows me (as the reader) to put my own perspective in place and fantasize not only what you as the writer are referring to but as the reader I can relate to however my perspective allows me to!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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nice to read heart feeling


Posted 8 Years Ago


Powerful raw emotions!
You told it straight up and with boldness,
but you are not anything God can't fix and I
already know you know that:) PTL
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 8 Years Ago


child of God

8 Years Ago

Yes i have grown in my writting since this peice i love going back and seeing how much i grown and h.. read more
Jamestown

8 Years Ago

I agree that's one of the beauties of writing it down and being Christian
our transformation .. read more
child of God

8 Years Ago

K sure will :)
Few words, and let it paints an image. What I like about this poem is that you don't give much detail-you leave the reader wondering what you are not only referring to but also it allows me (as the reader) to put my own perspective in place and fantasize not only what you as the writer are referring to but as the reader I can relate to however my perspective allows me to!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not bad for a first poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


The cream always rises to the top.

Scott

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow, I really enjoyed this poem. I think the language and the words you used really showed the message that you meant to convey. It has a very foreboding, empty, cold feeling to it. Also considering the fact that you said this was the first poem you ever wrote, I think it's great! Nice job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


child of God

10 Years Ago

Thank you ....
Deeply emotional and hurting. I can relate this pain to many others, including me, Even tho it was painful, its still a great writing.
100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very well done for your first poem. A lot of raw emotion, very blunt. Keep at it :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


child of God

10 Years Ago

Thank you.
This cut a jagged gash in my heart. -Favorites-

Posted 10 Years Ago


Oh, the anger, the emotional pain and the lifelong scars....you express it all so well in a few short lines. How brutally sad that you had to endure this sort of treatment. I hope writing about it is a catharsis for you and that you are able to move on to a better life. Lydi***

Posted 10 Years Ago



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