A Place Called Time

A Place Called Time

A Poem by kollaboratyve
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I wrote this on August 7, 1983

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To live in a place called time!

our souls was limited my passion was crying I had no control

out of my mind!

I do not know why I feel like dying

but it was just emotions

I do know why I feel like dying

but you can bet my love survived

baby!

I hope I am in your plans to change the world over and turn the mountains to sand

baby !

I hope I am in your plans to die for your cause

if not just leave my life in the hands of death

and there I will commit my

                            soul to be kept

© 2008 kollaboratyve


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wow this is so nice ,yes we all have that wish to die once in our lifetime,we have all seen this ,i like the way you tell him include me in your plans to change this miserable world ,yes this life is not for me,i will try and and change all thing like drive mountains into sand,i will change everything ,i will change me ,if only i could ,come lets dream we could...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I really love this.
The flow is amazing and the emotion makes it that much better...
Awesome write...I look forward to reading more by you...

Lynda

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with "Blade&Blood" - this does sound, in a way, like lyrics. My favorite part was the imagery of the mountains turning to sand. You managed to convey a deep kind of message is so little words. Write on.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

That was reall good. I can really relate to this. It reminds me of the old me. Anyways i loved it i think it is one of your best. I love the line " our souls was limited my passion was crying I had no control out of my mind!"



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow this is so nice ,yes we all have that wish to die once in our lifetime,we have all seen this ,i like the way you tell him include me in your plans to change this miserable world ,yes this life is not for me,i will try and and change all thing like drive mountains into sand,i will change everything ,i will change me ,if only i could ,come lets dream we could...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Deep...(especially for someone 2 years old-smile).
This is the kinda poem ( I feel) after life's lessons, and maturity,
that I would like to go back to and relive it, and embellish the
thoughts-making a good thought, a great poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one is very interesting. I could just see the narrator in tears... or, at least, pleading. Obviously, I really like the tone of this one. Very... convincing. And, honestly, it sounds like a song, in a way. lol.

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very passionate and sincere, I really like the flow and the imagery.
I didn't know that 14 lines could keep me in suspense the way it did,
excellent write!

-Marvin Lewis

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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