BEAST OF THE LIVING

BEAST OF THE LIVING

A Poem by kollaboratyve
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THIS POEM HAS A LITERAL AND SYMBOLIC MEANING-IT IS AN ALLEGORY OF SORTS

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Did I not triumph over your power?

Leaving the years many to exult over your subjection?

 Peripheral vibrations and inner rumbling of dark syrupy tinged tone.

Accolade of obsessed, repressed, recollections of manners gone by,

 could it be that your grave once beyond.

 has awakened you to the terrain of the living?

Children cringed hearts, blameless,

 thus delivered from your ravage seize!

 Awe! At the flamboyancy of your relentlessness, callous, and brutality to acquaintances celebrating the bliss you bring.

Broken hearted mothers sob infinite rivers of tears into everlasting graves.

Impatient Tombs sealed by the dust of the world engulfing concealed dreams and hopes,

 soon the proclaim will sound and the victorious sleepers erected stand throng,

 But a few, shall gather for the call of the roll of

Unquestionable earthly deeds thus satisfied.

 a reward of hope or doom!

 

© 2008 kollaboratyve


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Luthien of the Woods has the right idea; it really did remind me of the "End of the World", or in my case, the Book of Revelation. ;) This is truly something that would make me think critically, as well as something I could definitely get used to. lol! It's as if you took my usual topics and tones, and changed it into something with your own unique and impressive style!

Awesome job!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is a beautiful poem, I like its vintage feel.
It was profound and it had a sort of cinematic quality.
I enjoyed reading!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This feels like there's a good point behind it, but it seems like it's trying a little hard. The tone is preachy, but the message works well.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Much profound emotion throughout
as well as being beautifully written in imagery and metaphor...
TY for your wonderful entry!

Lynda

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Is this about life, the questions that have no answers, that we are constantly seeking, will we find peace or unrest. Impressive write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I'm sorry but this sounds like it's trying to be cleverer than it really is. The flow is stilted so that the theatrics are lost in a jumble of unconnected words. 'Children cringed hearts, blameless,
thus delivered from your ravage seize!' I can't even begin to translate this into English.
I have a personal dislike of elitist poetry and that is likely to be reflected in my gut reaction to this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Luthien of the Woods has the right idea; it really did remind me of the "End of the World", or in my case, the Book of Revelation. ;) This is truly something that would make me think critically, as well as something I could definitely get used to. lol! It's as if you took my usual topics and tones, and changed it into something with your own unique and impressive style!

Awesome job!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem reminds me of Apocalyptic literature. Are you referring to the Beast that was prophesied by Christian prophetic traditions?

"Awe! At the flamboyancy of your relentlessness, callous, and brutality to acquaintances celebrating the bliss you bring.
Broken hearted mothers sob infinite rivers of tears into everlasting graves.
Impatient Tombs sealed by the dust of the world engulfing concealed dreams and hopes,"

Such imagery also remind me of Dante's "Inferno" as he walked alongside Virgil in the different descents of hell, until he reached the part where the Beast was stuck to the ground and Dante has to climb over him.

"But a few, shall gather for the call of the roll of
Unquestionable earthly deeds thus satisfied.
a reward of hope or doom!"

This eschatological images echoe the "Judgment of the believers and the non-believers" found in Revelation.

A good conclusion to your passage.







Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are amazing. I'm glad i found you. This poem, each line, stands on its own as strong. your style kind of reminds me of one of my fav lyricists, lauryn hill. makes a statement, from beg to end. this one is my fav so far. thanks for sharing!

kena

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

'Impatient Tombs sealed by the dust of the world engulfing concealed dreams and hopes,

soon the proclaim will sound and the victorious sleepers erected stand throng,

But a few, shall gather for the call of the roll of

Unquestionable earthly deeds thus satisfied.'

Understood fully. Very straightforward. And yet confusing at the same time.... Nonetheless, you did a perfect job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Powerful imagery, and a powerful statement. Brought visions of knights and warriors and dead kings to my mind's eye. I could hear it as clearly as you were speaking in the room with me.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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