Perhaps

suddenly, I realized--

that if my mind freed my heart I could have lived ;

in the armor of your love .

Author's Note

" A novelist can tell story in 20 000 words; poet can show it in 20 words. "

Challenged by that statement, I tried how far I can go by 20 words -- and, here it is.

Reviews

[Tree]

I believe you have achieved what you sought out to do, which is to break down an idea to its most vital and pure core. It is not unlike what the physicist attempts to do with the atom... He knows there is something smaller lurking within, smaller than the electron and the quark. He seeks it out as a matter of truth. The poet here is doing the same. Also want to point out the tone of your piece, and how you used the –––dash, then consequently used the semi-colon; and slow the reader down, ––––making your point. This is the second well written snippet of a poem, I've read today. Well done, Belle.

[Sami Khalil]

A great summation; done in few words. Well done.

[Caradoc]

An interesting thought.

Although, I have also heard it said that the heart can be deceived.

How many of us have desperately clung to a love that just wasn't there? While others could see the truth, we ourselves were blind. So was it the mind that lied to us, keeping our heart imprisoned, refusing to let it see the truth? Or was it, perhaps, the heart, that always knew and allowed itself to be fooled and ultimately betrayed by its own feelings, its own desire for love?

Is it then the heart that shackles us to our lies, yearning for something it knows is not there?

An intriguing write, my friend. Very thought provoking.

-Cara

[Cool Handless Luke]

I agree with our friend Diego. There is a lot of depth within just these few lines. This one is particularly powerful I believe. Freedom within the armor of love and beyond. Well said belle!

[Belle]

I am overwhelmed by your another visit. Now, I feel the guilt of not even returning words about your works...

[Cool Handless Luke]

Lol, it's ok belle!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

well you showed a lot here...i like the juxtaposition of being freed, yet at the same time having the armor of love...protecting us...

there is something safe being within love...it is a sort of armor...and often the mind won't let us go there...the heart wants to..but if we have been hurt too much before...the mind won't free the heart to roam...we get too protective of ourselves with a different kind of armor that shields the heart from the light of love.

very well done., Belle.

jacob

[MOON]

Beautifully said the mind traps us. Lovely succinct write.

[Yellow Butterfly]

What a wonderful way to express your feelings....

A very uplifitng read and nicely penned...

[Chris]

Love has teeth too

[Belle]

Words of wisdom from a wise man are louder than any other words.
I believe in your wisdom. Thank you. I felt honored to be read again by you.

[Chris]

I read three and tasted love after each... You have it good or bad but its teeth definitely has you.