Am I?

Am I?

A Poem by lilrissriss
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A poem.

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If I provide you with company...
Am I your friend?

If I provide you with love...
Am I your family?

If I provide you with shelter...
Am I your home?

If there's no me...
Then are you alone?

© 2012 lilrissriss


Author's Note

lilrissriss
Say what you like, give me tips and ideas to make it better. i can take constructive criticism.

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I like it. It's much like the whole idea, if a tree falls in the forest and nobody is there to hear it, does it make any sound.
I think your words create a dynamic thought to muse upon and ponder just how one person truly attaches themselves to another and just how far the bond goes.

Thanks for sharing! Great Ink!
Aaron

Posted 7 Years Ago


Well, here goes, I think that it should end with ...'Then are you alone?
Nice writing though

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lilrissriss

7 Years Ago

Thank you for the tip. Sorry I'm JUST reading it now. I change it and it sounds much better that way.. read more

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Added on June 26, 2012
Last Updated on June 27, 2012
Tags: am, i, company, friend, love, family, alone, shelter, home, without, me, are, you, sad

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lilrissriss
lilrissriss

Waterloo, NY



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I'm Marissa and I've experienced far more than intended in the 17 years I've lived so far. I don't write much but when I do, I make sure to pour my whole heart and soul into whatever it is I'm creatin.. more..

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