A Life and Kids

A Life and Kids

A Poem by icaros13
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A limerick. Thank you, Dr. Wood, for your guidance.

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Headlong in love I once fell
I basked in its exquisite hell
She said I'd been nice
But not worth the price
My "baggage" had broken the spell

© 2012 icaros13


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I have always had a fear of this happening to me. I can only imagine how heart breaking it would be to be pushed to the side, because you are "damaged goods" in their eyes, but if your baggage scares someone away then they do not know how to truely love. Real love tenderly accepts you for who you are baggage and all. This person does not deserve you. Oneday you will find someone who truely loves you the way that you deserve to be loved. I really like this poem. The rhyming is great. It flows very well, awesome poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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8 Years Ago

. my dearest angelink ... you said it and you said it better than i ever could ... i completely .. read more
light and ashes

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well now my friend, it depends on the baggage, everyone has some, but is it vacation appropriate or does it look like you are moving out of state? lol. Don't let it block the door hon, if you can help it. Love this little limerick, I do not know exactly the structure of a limerick but I'm thinking you've done it proud!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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icaros13

8 Years Ago

Just two kids and a substantial life...
Everyone brings baggage to a relationship - what a shame people can't view it for what it is - an accumilation of life's experiences. It saddens me that people can see children as baggage. I was once considered baggage through no fault of my own. Great piece of writing you put your point across well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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You done good dude.. great limerick..
Do you know weeds are flowers to someone else ? ( ;


Posted 8 Years Ago


I have always had a fear of this happening to me. I can only imagine how heart breaking it would be to be pushed to the side, because you are "damaged goods" in their eyes, but if your baggage scares someone away then they do not know how to truely love. Real love tenderly accepts you for who you are baggage and all. This person does not deserve you. Oneday you will find someone who truely loves you the way that you deserve to be loved. I really like this poem. The rhyming is great. It flows very well, awesome poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

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8 Years Ago

. my dearest angelink ... you said it and you said it better than i ever could ... i completely .. read more
light and ashes

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
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. excellent work, monsieur ... however, my mind is saying that there is a typo in the last line ... maybe you meant to say "her baggage had broken the spell" ... for i don' think you have any baggage from what i know ... baggage is made up of biases and prejudices ... and you have none ...

Posted 8 Years Ago


icaros13

8 Years Ago

I put quotation marks around "baggage" because it is a direct quote. The title names the issue...
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8 Years Ago

. i hear you ...
Love it! and you obviously learned well from the Doctor. This is fun and yet, holds a lot of sad truth.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Hee Hee Hee. That's good.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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