Clockwork Spirit

Within the clockwork mechanism
of nature my gears turn, tired, worn,
they grind in the hope that the master
clockmaker might make my heart beat again

beyond the automaton of my being-
locked away in a coal bin of my own making:
sequenced, encoded and functional.
A muted spark in this elaborate but simple form

craving the spectacular waterworks of emotion
in limber and graceful movements, seeking
the linchpin of humanity among crystals and springs
that patiently await the return of my misplaced spirit.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

wishing for the turn of the wheel, t he spark - something to remind us who we are - this is lovely and forlorn at the same time.

[icelandicblue]

This definitely has that tundra feeling to it. Thanks Tammy.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Wow, you know sometimes we go through life thinking that we are alone in some specific emotion...Then we find with others who are honest and can share, there is real understanding and mutuality there. You speak of something I touched on in my poem, "Reflection." I had died a little inside and needed to be rekindled. This automaton of your being, completely sums that up for me perfectly. I like your DNA analogy! A muted spark! Beautiful language! Describing WANTING to cry...These are rare and choice emotions. It is a very worthy subject matter. I love it!!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Robby.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

But of course!!

[Samuel Dickens]

My father was a watch and clock repairman, so the title drew me into this world of gears and springs. I'd never considered it, but the idea works well. Sometimes, just a bit of cleaning and oil is all that's needed for the spirit to once again shine as new.

[icelandicblue]

Sounds like a good plan Samuel, thank you.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Absolutely beautiful and very profound!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much for reading this one Gleb.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

No problem. I now have quite a bit of spare time, so I'll happily read and comment through my gigantic request list. :D

[David Scott]

Now this was also worth the delay of heading home from the office...

I like the last line in the second stanza, "A muted spark in this elaborate but simple form".

You are showing some deep truth here Blue. It only takes a little spark to set the world on fire!

Lovely poem blue. Very much so.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much David. I like that you highlighted that line...I don't think I really appreciated it before.

[Arthur Crow]

Very well written and totally captivating from start to finish, much enjoyed!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you for reading and commenting.

[Nicole Williams]

I've never seen something quite like this,
simply amazing.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much. I appreciate your comment.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You have cleverly incorporated time in the heart of what matters... the human spirit thrives on it, as time, love, and life ticks away...we all need a "spark" to get us going...

A poignant thought to digest...Well penned!~xoxo~:)

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much for your lovely comment Robbie.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's my pleasure... I so glad it did. :)

[rhythm&blues]

This is an amazing poem, unique concept, well done.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much rhythm&blues. I appreciate it.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Great metaphors in this one...the industrial texture of the feel of the gears and metal--the clock, juxtaposed with the "heart" and emotion really give an emotional feel to this one. I like the imagery and the flow...really nothing that I didn't like about this one. Well done!

[icelandicblue]

Thank you Sarah,

Glad you liked the imagery and the flow.