Ruby Liquid

he doesn't love me

he's just good at pretending to

I can look into the empty blackness of his eyes

and see the truth

he feels nothing

but that nothing is enough to pretend for me

to pretend when he touches me that he loves my skin

to pretend when he kisses me that he loves my taste

some call him a monster

I call him love

he will give me everything I want

I only have to give him blood

ruby liquid coursing through my veins

I have enough to spare for this lie

for the fake life that we are living

I'll give whatever my cold lover wants

for him to keep pretending

all I want is to feel needed by someone

even if it is a monster

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of tale and need.
"all I want is to feel needed by someone
even if it is a monster"
Sometime need can lead us to monsters? Powerful words and thoughts. Left things for the reader to ponder. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Emily]

Loved that first line!!
Keep it up!!

[Bacchus]

to want love so bad
that its even okay when it's from someone sucking the life from you...
haunting...
and yet there is some little truth in all of us in that-
what we give up for "love"
a taste of feeling needed...
interesting, dark-yet somehow we don't completely distance ourselves from it
we sympathize.

[AliciaB]

Trying to think of accurate words to describe this poem... "creepy", "cool", and "well put together" come to mind. You do a good job throughout of developing a tone of both desperate longing and resigned hopelessness - the speaker knows she's in a terrible situation, yet still she feels the need to remain there and is unable to free herself from her addiction to this person. Also, very nice job on incorporating the idea of him being a monster from the very beginning, starting with the "empty blackness of his eyes" and consistently throughout the poem after that. It makes the final two lines that much more powerful - and believe me, they're quite the punch already. Those are my absolute favorite lines, and I also like "but that nothing is enough to pretend for me" and "some call him a monster / I call him love". Very intriguing piece overall. Excellent work!