The People

The People

A Poem by Sarissari
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Short poem

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The monster I became 
The destruction of the flame
Im sorry

You created a portrait for me
Flee to she
He said to me

In the bright light
He had sight
I had no might
You were my portrait

Your frame so small within my heart
He slowly took it apart
You ask me why
Yet, I remained a fly
to his ties

Beauty she was
Forever claimed
Becoming his meal
The portrait began to peel
Leaving me steal

Now you remain stained
I am ashamed
Forever will I be detained
Removing this name

© 2017 Sarissari


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"Yet, I remained a fly
to his ties"

I love this line, very witty.

I am not one of those who despises forced rhymes. I essentially think it is a worthy challenge to undertake, and an opportunity to play on common tropes. I thought you did that wonderfully.

Well done.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sarissari

7 Years Ago

Thank you Yann.
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this is very well craved. like old picture to the soil. i love how you go deep. desrcibe dark and light. all seems very real

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sarissari

7 Years Ago

Thanks Martin :) yeah this one was really real to me
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7 Years Ago

yes is does almost perfect.
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I appreciate the effort you made here.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sarissari

7 Years Ago

Thanks, I write from my personal experiences. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Added on December 26, 2016
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Sarissari
Sarissari

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