Pills

Another Poem

The doctors filled my prescription

As I waited for my conviction

I watched them mutter it will be ok

Just take one or two a day

Days turn to mess

But nevertheless

I felt their test

One maybe two they'd say

But it only left me in dismay

Yet a solution in my view

Could it be true?

A drink or two may do

Trickling blood filled my stew

Now, I know

One or two is the clue

To my flu

Author's Note

Just another poem. Hope you like and review

Reviews

[DookieSmiles]

Welcome to my neighborhood! Everyone I knows hooked on pills. Problems seem so endless..... I felt your poem. Great job and thanks for the read!

[Sarissari]

Thanks dookiesmiles

[Molly K]

This is a nice, easy to follow piece, I love the rhyming

[Sarissari]

thanks molly. I dont use big words much lol

[mercy party]

this was great in the way it made me feel as if i were in some tacky air-conditioned waiting room getting glared at wanting to jump out of your own skin. on the way home reflecting on the idea of moderation knowing it would last a day or two. Its just me, but at least your poem did something! i like it!

[Sarissari]

thanks mercy party

[matrixmark]

Easy to follow and good to read poem.

The first part - very well rhymed

Mark.

[Sarissari]

Thank you Matrixmark

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Days turn to mess
But nevertheless
I felt their test..

The poem is really nice. I enjoyed the read thanks for sharing.

[Sarissari]

Thanks Sky and no problem.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Your welcome!

[Tbear]

Oh those dastardly flus. Just need a bit of correction, nothing serious. I like that you wrote on something that normally isn't written about..

[Sarissari]

Thank you Tbear for the review. Curious on the corrections.

[Tbear]

There... their...i actually like it more after the third and fourthread 😊

[Sarissari]

Omg, Thats what I get for writing while tired. Just going to fix that. No one noticed anything...lol

[Tbear]

no biggie dear me..editing is the least of our worries ..te getting the emotion down is most important..care to swap critiques?? check out Response to The Blocked Writer and any others you choose :) cheers

[Sarissari]

yeah, I'll check them out and thanks :)

[GothonaWrites]

The state I feel I am in right now

[Sarissari]

Ohh dear, I hope the best. Thank you for the review.