Melting...

from ‘The Way of Grass’

 

We’re melting away

Apart from each other

Two Saturday candles

Reviews

[J. J. Nightingale]

THE MELTING OF A RELATIONSHIP .. A SAD HAPPENING .. BURNING BRIGHTLY AT THE BEGINNING .. COMPLETELY MELTED AWAY AT THE END .. NEVER TO BE TWO AGAIN ..

SAD AND LOVELY .. JASMINE

[Marie]

Good thought; good haiku--but isn''t there an extra syllable in the last line? Or are you using another form?

I'm not criticising--the poem is lovely.