Bananas ( from a point of view of someone who despises bananas)

please don't get offended if you like bananas!

Yellow toxication

gross, says an entire nation

enough to deflate the jubilation

that yellow intoxication

Author's Note

please tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Bec]

I think this might need just a little more added to it. I'm liking the rhymes in there.

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

The rhymes here feel a little bit forced, but all in all, it is an interesting write with a creative style and voice to it. The topic seems a little off the wall, but I guess that's how all the best pieces start.

interestingly penned

[Briana O'Connor]

m in love. This is hilarious, poetic, fluid, descriptive...I could go on and on. You captured so much in your few words about something as simple as a banana. Absolutely beautiful!

[Star]

It is random but good. And the font colour. ... not nice really.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

I love bananas! I am eating one right now.
Funny poem!
Well written!
I liked it!
:)

[Ashira Macy]

You are coming out with some funny ones lately. I think you are the first person that I have heard of who doesn't like bananas.

[Shapirta]

WHAAAAAAAT?! that's reDUNKulous! a disastrophe! how did you ever let that happen?! three quarters of my grade don't like bananas! ooooh, just noticed it, disastrophe is a good word to use in a poem!

[Ashira Macy]

Haha maybe it is your generation. And I agree, that is an epic new word. Let us hope it becomes a regular part of the English language!

[Shapirta]

haha. like frindle. but that would be cool.

[Frieda P]

Aside from the yucky color of your font, I enjoyed this...great rhyme scheme.

[Baby Ricochet]

I love bananas. They're great post workout because they have a high glycemic index. Lots of simple sugars when your body is screaming for simple sugars after you burned off all your glycogen. You could always drink a coke though. Great rhymes in this with big words which is always entertaining. Like a stripper dancing with a snake and a feather boa. Even if you hate strippers, you're gonna watch.

[Regina K. Pride]

Rhyming is definitely your strength. Maybe you could use commas at the end of certain stanzas to break up the lines. For example after "jubilation" and the first "intoxication." This was a cool poem! Good job! :)

[snow_angel]

Cute and funny, I do like bananas, but I love the description you gave, they do get tiring after a while. :p