Bananas ( from a point of view of someone who despises bananas)

Bananas ( from a point of view of someone who despises bananas)

A Poem by Shapirta
"

please don't get offended if you like bananas!

"
Yellow toxication
gross, says an entire nation
enough to deflate the jubilation
that yellow intoxication

© 2015 Shapirta


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Bec
I think this might need just a little more added to it. I'm liking the rhymes in there.

Posted 4 Years Ago


The rhymes here feel a little bit forced, but all in all, it is an interesting write with a creative style and voice to it. The topic seems a little off the wall, but I guess that's how all the best pieces start.

interestingly penned

Posted 6 Years Ago


m in love. This is hilarious, poetic, fluid, descriptive...I could go on and on. You captured so much in your few words about something as simple as a banana. Absolutely beautiful!

Posted 6 Years Ago


It is random but good. And the font colour. ... not nice really.

Posted 6 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love bananas! I am eating one right now.
Funny poem!
Well written!
I liked it!
:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


You are coming out with some funny ones lately. I think you are the first person that I have heard of who doesn't like bananas.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Shapirta

6 Years Ago

WHAAAAAAAT?! that's reDUNKulous! a disastrophe! how did you ever let that happen?! three quarters of.. read more
Ashira Macy

6 Years Ago

Haha maybe it is your generation. And I agree, that is an epic new word. Let us hope it becomes a re.. read more
Shapirta

6 Years Ago

haha. like frindle. but that would be cool.
Aside from the yucky color of your font, I enjoyed this...great rhyme scheme.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I love bananas. They're great post workout because they have a high glycemic index. Lots of simple sugars when your body is screaming for simple sugars after you burned off all your glycogen. You could always drink a coke though. Great rhymes in this with big words which is always entertaining. Like a stripper dancing with a snake and a feather boa. Even if you hate strippers, you're gonna watch.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Rhyming is definitely your strength. Maybe you could use commas at the end of certain stanzas to break up the lines. For example after "jubilation" and the first "intoxication." This was a cool poem! Good job! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Cute and funny, I do like bananas, but I love the description you gave, they do get tiring after a while. :p

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on September 17, 2014
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Tags: bananas, poem, limerick, food, yellow

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