Choking Me

  You are pushing me under

  Your pain,

  Drowning me,

  Choking me. 

  I don't understand

  What I did wrong.

  What did I do to

  Make you do this to me?

  Answer me,

  Before the agony

  Is too much and

  I fade away into nothing.  

Author's Note

I don't know...

Reviews

[Alexis]

I think I can definitely relate. I've had experiences like this before. I especially enjoyed the first stanza. This was a good poem! Keep on writing!!

[Alice In My Own Wonderl..]

I liked this. Keep writing :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Simple, with sparse wording and raw emotion, a dark look into the world of the human mind, slow floe and grammatically sound, well done.

very emotional and interesting, nicely done

[sherwin]

Straight to the point, simple with meaning. All good stuff, but dont stop challenging yourself with imagery, perception, etc. Keep at it.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Good poem. I can relate...

[Fabric Pulse]

Some things will always go unanswered, you just have to move on from it and leave it to die in ashes as you're re-born elsewhere for your life.

[raindroplove]

thats really good

[Zack Burton]

This is very deep, emotional, and interesting. Most of all, I like that it's technically (technically) a poem and you've classified it as a story.

[A.E. Surdam]

Wow, seriously, this is actually very interesting. It makes you think, like "what happened" and "did something go wrong". It so makes me want more. I love how it is though, very nice and interesting. :)