Death Becomes Her

Death Becomes Her


A young lady whose sad and lost her way!



She walks the face of the earth

Full of despair and anguish

Her wretched soul seeking rest.

She peers through sadden eyes for happiness,

but she lost it long ago.


She prays for relief, but none ever comes.

She knows she doesn't have the courage

to take her own life, so she'll go on living in

this decomposing shell praying for the end.


Resting on her death bed, her breathing

grows ragged, but she's not afraid.

She welcomes the relief.


Family and friends gather with misty eyes

at the casket to say their goodbyes.

They gaze at the her body in awe.

She no longer looks sad, but radiant and peaceful

 They decided death becomes her!


Author's Note

Well tell me what you think! BE HONEST!

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Hard for some people to find reason and purpose to be alive. A very good story in the poem. Some people prefer sadness and misery to the possibility of happiness. I like the last two lines. A excellent ending to a excellent poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago

when we are in pain in life; death does seem to be peaceful for the body and the anguish is put to rest from the rest of the living world....

Posted 12 Years Ago

Dark and depressing. But it's done very well and it is the truth.

Posted 12 Years Ago

I think this is has a very accurate thought and is shown clearly. When people have had hard lives or battled a horrible illness they do look peaceful and finally at rest when they pass on to the next world for me that I think of Heaven. I worked at a hospital for five years and so this exact thing happen time and time again. You have penned this quite well.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Another work in the depressive, suicidal theme. As good as the rest.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Wow...very, very powerful poem. This is really, really, really good!

Posted 12 Years Ago

Wonderfully written my dear. I do see a spelling error and the end might be better without the exclamation point, in my opinion. But I very much enjoyed it. I'm looking forward to reading more from you.

Posted 12 Years Ago

I have to say... these few words go a long way.. the message is all so familiar, and without question.. sad, but you captured the essence of the piece perfectly.. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago

I liked the concept, perhaps due the fact that in my mind set death does provide peace. Whether the trouble is illness or unsatisfaction, in death there are no more worries... Unless you take into fact religion and the cost of suicide....
Other than that there is a reason why tombstones have the R.I.P. Rest in peace.
Grammatically you confuse me at times with your wording, specifically your tenses.
You go from present to past, past to present. It lost me a little.

I didn't comment on your other poem of dangerous obsession, but work on it[tenses]. Other than that nice work. ^_^

Posted 12 Years Ago

So sad
this line
She prays for relief, but none never comes.
did you intend to use never or instead ever ?
It is so sad the end of time here Winter just makes me sad all the time I cant wait for spring

Posted 12 Years Ago

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19 Reviews
Added on December 5, 2010
Last Updated on December 19, 2010
Tags: Despair, Anguish, Sad



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