Creative Poetry Group A girl friend wants more from her boy friend.



He keeps her on a shelf, takes her down only when it complements his ego.

A filament of thread he strings her along.

She wants a commitment, but he likes to play the field. She is only one of his many trophies.


Emotions compress her heart.

She wants more, she needs more.

Voices ring in her head that she can do better. She wishes that he would not pass her by. A hallucination of what could of been bring tears to already swollen eyes.

Speculation of his ways tell her he'll never change.


It's time she decides to cut the filament of thread, break free and spread her wings and enjoy life. Their love has deteriorated to rancid. The time has come for her to tell him, Aurevior---Adio's (Goodbye)


Selfpity robs her blindly.

Confidence is pulverized.

What will she be without him?

Loneliness pulsates.


She looks in the mirror of lectures, gives herself a shake, reminds herself she is better than being just someones trophy.

"Aurevior----Adio's (Goodbye)"

She whispers the words in practice.


Dour mood transforms into deviation mode.

She's tired of his obstinate behavior.

Little black book she opens.

Date made, but not with him.


Sexy back dress.

Untamed locks frame face.

Lips painted.

Eyes gleem with anticipation.

Life is feeling better.


Date picks her up on time.

They dine at a luxurious restaurant.

Hotheaded ex walks up.

She stands, kisses him hard on the lips.

"Aurevior----Adio's," she says.


He steps back, confused eyes stare at her.

Fluent in French and Spanish, but her English he understands better.

"Goodbye," she says clearly.

Life resuscitated.


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Vocabulary astounded me. It doesn't seem you are use to writing what I consider "generic" these days, which makes me smile. This piece uses the perfect font and bolds at the right time to enhance the emotions produced. After reading it more than once I also see hidden writing patterns that go above 4 or 5 rhyming schemes. This is my own breakdown of a poem or song, but is very impressive. WELL DONE

Zacky D.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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This reminds me of a poem I wrote some time ago..being tazken off of the shelf on occasion just does not cut it ...does it? Kathie

Posted 11 Years Ago

Great job, well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago

well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Bam! Showed him.
Loved this poem,
very clever and well
written! Loved the ending.

Posted 12 Years Ago

!Gracias mi amigo! I wish I knew how to say that in French as well... Anyway I really loved reading this poem. She is not one to hold on to what is not there and she knew that his love was not there, so she cut the thread and spred her wings and now I bet she sores highr than she did before she met him. What a wonderfull piece...

Posted 12 Years Ago

Muy Bien (Im taking Spanish) I absoulutely loved it!! Great meaning and the vocab was WOW. . Just well written and great job

Posted 12 Years Ago

Sounds like a good idea to me. Us women have to be strong in these circumstances, some stronger than others, therefore it's good to handle things straight on, make a clean sweep even if our heart is breaking, but if things are meant to be, they will be and we have to backtrack filling in the gaps and take over from where we left off with new rules.That's when we have to shove all the nastiness under the bed and start afresh....making things even better than before... That's life. We live and learn as we go along. Head and heart...difficult to agree sometimes....but heart always wins....and head gets a bit of a bashing..haaa.
Well done I like this 101.
Thanks for share x

Posted 12 Years Ago

I love the wording in this poem. A final kiss goodbye. I love this for all of the details and the woman becoming strong and realizing she doesn't need the scoundrel.

Posted 12 Years Ago

You have a talent of holding the impact for the finale! lol
I love this hon....I find your poetry like tale form...become immersed, wonderful xx

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Awesome!!! Thats what I think to, I dont want to be his trophy. lol not
Never been in that position. lol I like this from start to finish with enphasis on the finish, the last two stanza's were perfect.
Loved it

Posted 12 Years Ago

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23 Reviews
Added on July 12, 2011
Last Updated on July 17, 2011
Tags: Love, Commitment, Goodbye, Girl friend, Boy friend



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