Lost At Sea(Creative Poetry Group)

A Young woman face life's turmoils.

She is lost at sea, a voyager over troubled water,

saturated in futility. Scars fashion her life, injuries

left with lingering damage to her aching soul.

Scenario of past events blind her.

 

Fluid of tears run down a sullen face.

She's covered in privation.

Born to parents infertile to love, peers

that made her life a living hell, a husband

that's abusive and destructive.

Inept is her life.

 

Cascading emotions control her.

Anger infectious as a disease.

Sadness gloomy as a rain storm

Hate as evil as satan himself.

A wirlpool of disrepute she floats in.

 

Erosion of her life falls at her feet like dust particles.

All dreams feel eradicated.

What she must face next is unpredictable.

She cries an ocean of tears, hoping to be

washed away by the tides that roll in.

 

Continous debris of fear trap her.

Tears splashing aimlessly diminishes bubbling hope.

Tranquil is invisible.

Her life is privy between her and God.

She prayes to see the light house of guiance,

but she's lost at sea, a voyager over troubled water.

 

Author's Note

For the creative poetry group.
I had to write about water, using the words that's in my tag box!
Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Dream Weaver]

Melancholy desperation and hopelessness comes to mind
with this sadly beautiful write..

[Poetic Beauty]

I must say you took this challenge and really rolled with it. You used water to describe so many different emotions and the fine descriptions allow me to visualize this woman in my mind.

[Judy Ponceby]

Wonderful use of the words. And such a very heartbreaking evocation of emotion. Most excellent work :)

[Star Wolf]

A very well written story of sadness and despair. Love the vivid imagery you use, it brings the story alive.

[Krystal Nicole]

Very good imagery. . Nice

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

You put on a clinic on how to use a metaphor....
with a stunning beautiful glimmer of hope at the end.

[?]

Beautiful and bittersweet
Love the descriptions and imagery

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Beautiful and yet a sad longing and lonliness stray here.
The descriptions and imagery mix together brillaintly liike an ocean.
Wonderful~

[An owl on the moon]

You weave magic into metaphors and bring about such a sadness.. a despair in her lostness and longing... Beautiful and bittersweet...

[realmwriter]

I think you nailed it my friend. She is indeed a woman in termoil...