"Elegance"

"Elegance"

A Poem by stephen dillon
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detruction of all good things feel similar

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 A Connections not thorough so the image won’t show

Until the fuse gets replaced you’ll never know

What there is beyond the road making it so?

You cannot see what’s after the river

And just before the trees

Where it all began and where it all died

The place where she bled

Next to the spot where we cried

Somehow wires got hot crossed and a tube has blown

Consequently shards and razors were elegantly thrown

© 2013 stephen dillon


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You cannot see what's after the river
And just before the trees
Where it all began and where it all died -- great lines.

I like the juxtaposition of nature and something like electricity and fuses...it's a nice contrast that illicits a certain emotion. Some great imagery as well "Somehow wires got hot crossed and a tube has blown"--this is insanely unique and quite fantastic as an image. Overall, I really enjoyed this write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

8 Years Ago

thanx i will check outyour work



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I like the way it put a mental image into my head, very beautiful written! I hope to see more of your writing very soon Stephen :)
A very beautiful piece!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I love the lines that seem to be popular with everyone. I'm also curious trying to visualize those razors and shards elegantly thrown. I've missed your work and I hope that you are ok.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

7 Years Ago

i'm not doing so hot mentaly but i have 1 and 1/2 books plus a split in the works
icelandicblue

7 Years Ago

I think of you and your struggles. Bit you are being productive. I am happy for you. Stay strong ste.. read more
You cannot see what’s after the river; And just before the trees; Where it all began and where it all died


I loved these lines. You have a way with words and you're good at free verse. Keep it up and keep sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


You cannot see what's after the river
And just before the trees
Where it all began and where it all died -- great lines.

I like the juxtaposition of nature and something like electricity and fuses...it's a nice contrast that illicits a certain emotion. Some great imagery as well "Somehow wires got hot crossed and a tube has blown"--this is insanely unique and quite fantastic as an image. Overall, I really enjoyed this write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

8 Years Ago

thanx i will check outyour work
Excellent read and write

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed the rhythm of this piece as well as the imagery. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I really like the way you write. This is a beautiful poem. I LOVE when people rhyme, I think it makes for a pretty piece of work. You're great and I am looking forward to reading more of your work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

8 Years Ago

thank you soo much i have been getting some pretty harsh reviews so this is very comforting hopefull.. read more
should i do some spokenword?

Posted 8 Years Ago


well, "Dillon", that's an wonderful write. you got me man. Nice flow of ink, words are powerful here.
well written

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

what a wonderful piece of writing
I always enjoyed cinderblock but this is my favorite of yours
details throughout imagery that sparks nicely
thank you for sharing

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

stephen dillon

8 Years Ago

thanx alot i really appriciate it

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stephen dillon
stephen dillon

savannah, GA



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