One Simple Cut

A swipe of the blade

erases all of his misery.

The blood that drips

is all the relief he needs.

He sighs and closes his eyes

letting the red paint the floor.

His heart stops beating

and his hands go limp.

The blade falls from his bloodied fingers

his whole life ruined by one simple cut.

***

His body, limp and lifeless

He invades her dreams.

She sees his face everywhere.

He has come back for her.

She knows she screwed up

she regrets her cruel words.

She knows it was all her fault

and she knows he loved her so.

But he ended all of that

by one simple cut. 

Author's Note

for an acquaintance. not my best work, but, whatever. review?

**awarded 3rd Depressing Writer in the Depression contest**
**awarded Sad:( in the depressing poems contest**
**awarded made me sad in the depressing contest**
** awarded ♥♫♪Best Poet♥♫♪ in the ♥♫♪Poetic♥♫♪Poetry♥♫♪ contest**

Reviews

[Brenden Moran]

This is really good, I like it. Few things though, lets see...line 10, replace "with" with "by" so that it is grammatically correct. Line 12, place a "He" at the beginning of the line. Rework line 14 a bit, kinda awkward. Line 15, "screwed up" perhaps might be a more accurate representation of the mood you are trying to set. Hope it helps. Good job once again.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Heartbreaking! This is a tragic tale... a very dark piece. Nice job!

[Jasmine Thousand]

This is sad. I thought it was one of your best, actually. It's amazing.
~Jasmine Thousand~

[grace]

amazing. you are amazing!

[BloodyMary]

Too true. Too many people. Too much blood.

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

this was beautiful.., i like how it showed the boys emotions but also the girls and their thoughts on it all...this was an amazing piece you should be very proud of it...

[KT]

Very beautiful and sad. Really touches me. Loved it!

[Unknown]

beautiful

[13ReasonsWhy]

yes Kodyholm. wow.

[FadingShadow]

Wow....Just wow

[13ReasonsWhy]

AMAZING!! sad but gets the point across... a beautiful write. i hope you're friend will enjoy it and be affected by it in a positive way. :)