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A Poem by Devesh

Muffled sounds of feet
on a blanket of snow,
sounded like a whisper, 
a whisper in the know.
The rustling of the leaves sang
the song of a life leaving,
destined to go on
and leave behind the grieving.
A lament lovely and sweet
echoed through the wood, 
as the sun beat retreat
to where the light would..

© 2014 Devesh


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Simplicity at its best. Nice, easy rhymes. The peaceful and pleasant setting provides the right background for the serious subject matter. You have painted a serene picture of Death. Noble and dignified. The imagery is again, simple but beautiful. My favourite lines were
"The rustling of the leaves sang
the song of a life leaving"
Keep writing! I think you have a very bright future. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for rwading and for the lovely review, Augustus! :))
Augustus

9 Years Ago

You are most welcome



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Beautifully, vivid images! Loved it Devesh!

~Stefanie

Posted 9 Years Ago


The imagery in this poem is simply beautiful..Well done;

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thank you!
maria  ( rose)

9 Years Ago

my pleasure!!
Descriptions are key. This poem was lovely, it used all my senses my just reading the words.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Lauren! Good to see you back here :)
Nature and the things it inspires... As always, superb! :D Good job Devesh! ^.^

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Chelsea! :D
Konigin

9 Years Ago

You are very welcome! ~.~
Simplicity at its best. Nice, easy rhymes. The peaceful and pleasant setting provides the right background for the serious subject matter. You have painted a serene picture of Death. Noble and dignified. The imagery is again, simple but beautiful. My favourite lines were
"The rustling of the leaves sang
the song of a life leaving"
Keep writing! I think you have a very bright future. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for rwading and for the lovely review, Augustus! :))
Augustus

9 Years Ago

You are most welcome
So bittersweet teddy bear, really tugs at the heartstrings, nicely pen'd my friend!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Frieda :)
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

Great work hon :) My pleasure.
A lovely poem Devesh. Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks, Erik! :))
This line touched me to the core: "the song of a life leaving". It can be read for different circumstances and it truly a sad yet beautiful line. The whole poem is stunning, Devesh. Beautiful, sad, yet still lovely in a way. Great work! (:

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thank you for the lovely review, Madalyn. :))
Excellent poetry Devesh.Although rife with sadness :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Vidya Bacchus

9 Years Ago

You are welcome :)

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