The Gate

The Gate

A Poem by Devesh

Fading shadows lighted the way
as I walked through the woods
and saw the leaves sway
like I never could.
No pain could weigh them down,

though the leaves were brown
on the verge of leaving
a wreath they were heaving
from the earth from which
the great tree rose,
the gate had always been open
and also very close.

© 2014 Devesh


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I love it Devesh!!!!!! The imagery was spectacular! It made me envision Fall/Autumn. It made me think that the person in the poem was sad and I felt like maybe they lost something dear to them. Amazing job my dear Friend. Please, don't EVER stop writing. :))))))) ^,^

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Konigin

9 Years Ago

HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDD Of course I got you. :PPPPPPPPPPP And yays!!!! Do I get a prize???.. read more
Devesh

9 Years Ago

Yep, one more packet of Poppins for you :P Hopefully, you will :))
Konigin

9 Years Ago

Hooorayy!!!!!! :P :DDDDDDD :)) Yeah. Hopefully I will.



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Beautiful. I love how you described the leaves. Nice job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Addy :)
"Fading shadows lighted the way" Instead of using the word 'lighted' I think the word 'lit' would work better in this line. I think it reads smoother.

This was a beautiful poem Devesh! A very refreshing read. :)

~Stefanie

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

I'll change it! Thank you, Stefanie :)
Truly wonderful poem... the various seasons depicts the roller coaster of our life.
beautifully written..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks! :)
a person walking towards the autumn of his life...noticing the gate open, waiting for him...

no more pain to endure...a kind ending.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Always enjoy reading your reviews, Jacob! Thanks for reading :)
This is so lovely, Devesh! As always, I thoroughly enjoyed...you have such a wonderful way with words.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Elina! :)
This is so beautiful Devesh. You've got some really amazing imagery going on! Great job, i always look forward to your writing.
- Brookly.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Brookly! :))
You paint such vivid pictures with your words Devesh.Absolutely great poetry my friend :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Vidya! :))
Vidya Bacchus

9 Years Ago

You are so welcome:)
I love it Devesh!!!!!! The imagery was spectacular! It made me envision Fall/Autumn. It made me think that the person in the poem was sad and I felt like maybe they lost something dear to them. Amazing job my dear Friend. Please, don't EVER stop writing. :))))))) ^,^

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Konigin

9 Years Ago

HAHAHAHAHA!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDD Of course I got you. :PPPPPPPPPPP And yays!!!! Do I get a prize???.. read more
Devesh

9 Years Ago

Yep, one more packet of Poppins for you :P Hopefully, you will :))
Konigin

9 Years Ago

Hooorayy!!!!!! :P :DDDDDDD :)) Yeah. Hopefully I will.
Great poem, wonderful imagery :) you continue to amaze me with your talent :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Devesh

9 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Jackson :))

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Devesh
Devesh

Hannover, Germany



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