Shattered

Broken...

 

Shattered

By Jack Ivey

 

Tiny slivers, scattered, lost

To what do we now owe this cost

Of love’s embrace no longer seen

Reflecting on the midnight dream

 

Days of past when we were new

On morning’s grass and crystal dew

The rising sun to fill our eyes

Amidst the warmth of summer skies

 

Though time hath proved the enemy

To clench thy love away from me

As if a thief in shadowed stance

Removed the essence of romance

 

Alas those days were all but clear

Upon the breath of the featured fear

To disappear before they start

In pieces of my shattered heart

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[s y e]

All of your sad writes that I'm reading right now are so relatable. :( another beautiful piece.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my sweet friend. My sky is so much brighter today since you have smiling down on my world.

[Carissa Marie]

A beautiful piece. but its sad. :(

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much.

[Yasmin]

I like this poem a lot.
very strong and beautiful.
you did a great job on the rhyme
My favorite part is the beginning

"Alas those days were all but clear
Upon the breath of the featured fear
To disappear before they start
In pieces of my shattered heart"
Amazing
Can't wait to read more
Well done

[Jack...]

Thank you so much for stopping by and reading my work and for the wonderful comments.

[Lily Mae]

Very painful.. being shattered and broken...left for dead emotionally is the worst.. You penned it well my friend..xo

[Jack...]

Thank you, I am happy you enjoyed it.

[Salar Majak]

Days of past when we were new

On morning’s grass and crystal dew

The rising sun to fill our eyes

Amidst the warmth of summer skies


this is such a great write that flows amazingly!!!!!!! never once did i stop because the rythem was just so devine!!! great story this poem tells, great poem in itself, thank YOU for sharing this.

[Jack...]

You are very welcome and thank you so much for your kind review and comments.

[Salar Majak]

:D, you are welcome!!! i love it when great poems cross my way!!!!

[Jack...]

I love it when great readers cross mine.

[Salar Majak]

:D

[David Scott]

It is impossible to unbreak the glass. The picture and the poem mirror this painful truth.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[EileenMarie]

I envy your ability to rhyme so beautifully! Excellent poem.....

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[WingsToFly]

Loved you rhyming. A beautiful piece.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[I, Rene]

I love the method in which you reach the end of a poem, it has such rhythm always. wonderful write.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[Christoph Poe]

This is a lot more complex than the other poem I had read by you. I can't say I don't like it either. You have this way of rising action in your poetry without telling us anything, but rawly showing us with emotions. (I might even add that I'm a tad jealous of this defeat, because I often struggle with the rising and falling climaxes in my stories and/or poems.) I'm a firm believe that art is not art if it does not show any sign of emotion, and you have captured me well in this piece!

"As if a thief in shadowed stance
Removed the essence of romance"

This is where I really discovered what was going on. (That's if I comprehended it right. I tend to get completely different meanings out of poetry, when it was intended for something else.) I felt as if the narrator suffers the damage left of a cheating partner, as if they might have even predicted it in the beginning of the relationship, but they still endured it.

Any negative thoughts this round? None at all. At least none worth mentioning. I greatly enjoyed it, and I look forward to more! I get a lot of RRs sent to me for some reason, and it's difficult to keep up. Feel free to inbox me if you have anything you specifically want me to look at! Be sure to include any questions you might want me to answer as well.

So, until next time,
--Christoph Poe

[Jack...]

Thanks Chris, I appreaciate you wonderful review and you were very close to the meaning. It wasn't necessarily a cheating partner, but one lost to another.