In Lieu of Sunny Days

In Lieu of Sunny Days

A Poem by Jack...
"

Sunshine on my pillow makes me happy

"

In Lieu of Sunny Days

By jack

 

I wake to find the ripples of a distant weeping light

Forces fed of clouded skies come showering this night

Drenched among the tepid dreams, misfortune brings the storm

Buried deep in thoughtless sound, of all this world hath born

 

Though I shall stand before this sky astonished in its view

Wading in a pool of hope and faith long overdue

Facing that so terrible, awash its torrid gaze

To cast it far beyond my reach in lieu of sunny days

© 2013 Jack...


Author's Note

Jack...
Written for Helena's Blue Rose Cafe TOVLI'S TEN poetry contest


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

"I wake to find the ripples of a distant weeping light"

So much imagery! I could feel the sunshine... I love it. (: This is a truly beautiful piece. ^_^ Great work!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

My sweet friend, you thrill me this morning. Thanks ever so much.
Wonderful piece. I really enjoy your vocabulary.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks man. I appreciate it.
Without the storms we would not fully appreciate the sunshine. Such is the state of being human. Nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thank you
I really enjoyed reading this poem. I love the metaphors of comparing sadness to the rain, and despite having the constant showers washing over you, you have this hope that sunny days are just around the corner. I love the imagery, great job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Short but...amazing write

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks Nick
Yet another amazing poem, Jack. Very well done :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend
amazing one

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much
Cara

6 Years Ago

^-^
A stunning write, Jack.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Dear Sera, not near as stunning as your eyes, but thank you for the kind words.
Drenched among the tepid dreams, misfortune brings the storm
indeed. A succinct write yet saturated with atmosphere. Well done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

thank you so much my friend
Short but how strong. One can feel the emotions. Nice image as well because I painted a similar looking landscape yesterday. Thanks for sharing this write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I would love to see your landscape, maybe in your photos?
Zahra

6 Years Ago

Sure, it is just my second.

First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

466 Views
20 Reviews
Rating
Added on February 18, 2013
Last Updated on April 19, 2013
Tags: Storms, sunshine

Author

Jack...
Jack...

San Antonio, TX



About
Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Hummingbirds Hummingbirds

A Poem by Jack...