Hyperventilating

Inspired by my sweet poet friend Frieda. Thanks for the wonderful words and photo...

 

Hyperventilating

 

Zephyrs breach this cobble wall

Gusts of morning glory breezes

Swirl enchanting echoes about my weary mind

I reach for the top, pulling myself to my feet

So that I may see that which is calling

In gale force phrases of poetic vistas…finding me

 

“Hallucinating?”

 

Breathless, I lean on moss covered stone

Weakened by mystic dreams and sighed fragrance,

For the beauty which engulfs my sight

Of lavender reaches in ribbon’d flow,

Brush strokes of cocoa eyes smiling

Grasps my body, wrapping me in passion’d bliss…touching me

 

“Hypnotically”

 

“What magic is this?” I call out from the shadows

In wheezing voice of broken harmony

“Tis love,’ she whispers as my breath escapes

Clutching my chest in fevered emotions

Wide eyed dimensions course my now beaming face

As all of life has bloomed within my being…and I fall

 

“Hyperventilating”

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

What it feels like to fall in love.

Reviews

[Blue]

Exceptionally beautiful, Jack. You described the feeling effortlessly.

[Jack...]

Thank you Blue. You are so very kind to me.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A touching, relative and clear appraisal for one that writes so well, good read.

[Jack...]

Than you so much Thomas.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is awesome!!!.What lines , they could make a girl swoon my friend.I much enjoyed this.

[Jack...]

Thrilled you enjoyed this one Vidya. Thanks so very much.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Justsimplyjulia]

*squeals* this hit the nail right on the head!!!! I loved this!!!! FABULOUS!
-Dragon

[Jack...]

I am thrilled you enjoyed this. Thank you.

[Rita L. Sev]

“What magic is this?” I call out from the shadows
In wheezing voice of broken harmony
“Tis love,’...

Whoo hoo! This poem is magic in itself, Jack - you have captured the falling... and left the reader gasping. :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Rita. I am gasping for breath because of your review.

[Shaun Payton]

Damn Jack, that was off the hook cool and endearing. A breath of the freshest air struck my imagination. The world suddenly calmed and hope gave me shivers. What a powerful beautiful experience it was to read this.

[Jack...]

Shaun, you blow me away with your reviews. Thanks so much my friend.

[Shaun Payton]

I try to leave something that lets the poet know their work means something to people:) You are welcome Jack.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Wow,
We all need to feel this at least once in our lives, and hopefully it lasts til we part from Earth.
The high emotions high are touching and full of love.

[Jack...]

Thank you Josie. I love having your beautiful smile grace my pages.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are Welcome, Jack always a pleasure to read!

[Lydia Shutter]

There is no force quite as urgent and powerful as the one pushing us over the cliff when we fall in love. What a great way to describe it! Once again, your words are woven together seamlessly! Lydi**

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Lydi. I appreciate your friendship.

[m.s.early]

Every time I think you've out done yourself, you prove me wrong, so I'm not going to say it here ;)

It reminds me of ancient Gaelic love songs encapsulating the moment the heart awakens and finds itself host to another. I see the fates surrounding the narrator and weakening him, the thin film of self preservation eroding and his senses utterly surrendering to love.

It made me lonely for the moment, but also brought back memories of that bliss from days long gone.

Bravo

[Jack...]

Wow, thanks so much X. Your review blows the poem away. I appreciate your kindness always my friend.

[Mark]

Old musty memories are called to mind by this piece. A jaded heart now, I can smile and may even chuckle at the remembered force. Thank you for the thoughts and remembrances.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Mark for stopping by today. Happy you enjoyed this.