A Million Tiny Pieces

A Million Tiny Pieces

A Poem by Jack...
"

Oh how I wish I could keep it together

"

 

 

 

A Million Tiny Pieces

 

 

Taken while you wept on clustered fears of empty dreams,

broken remnants shuttered as in some storm cloud cellar

and yet the pain seeps through tiny cracks

invading every pore, seeking that which keeps fracturing

 

Puddles form at frozen feet, unable to move, chilled of anguish,

sub-zero burdens slither their way into the mind’s endless pathways,

hiding in corners, darkened at angular positions,

wedges of meeting points sheltering these evil thoughts

 

Falling on tender knees, hands clenched, pleading on tear drop pages

emotions, these concrete wishes stained on thin lines

appear from chained memories, tethered to branchless trees,

striking swiftly as I watch your heart shatter…

 

into a million tiny pieces on the floor…and I with it

© 2014 Jack...


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Jack...
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Sad but beautiful thank you for pending. Enjoyed. Reading. This.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Sometimes it breaks our heart to see those we love suffering .Well said dear friend :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

I just wish I could make their world right me friend. Thank you so much.
Vidya Bacchus

6 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
We all take refuge in sadness...this is work of sadness is beautiful...some of the phrases are wonderful "clustered fears of empty dreams", "these concrete wishes stained on thin lines
appear from chained memories"! Brilliant work

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thank you so very much my friend. This was written for a friend that was having a hard time.
Chandradhish Ghosh

6 Years Ago

Then you must be a great friend to have...
Jack...

6 Years Ago

Some might disagree, but thank you so much.
Jaaaaaaaaaaaaack! This is a sad poem. :c
I...LOVE it!

Truly exceptional, friend! Made me feel sad. And happy 'cause I read it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Katherine. I am thrilled you enjoyed this.
Katherine R.

6 Years Ago

Sad romance poetry FOR THE WORLD!
One of the hardest things in writing a poem is ending it. You, on the other hand, do so effortlessly. I mean, my favorite part of your poems is often the ending line. It's always a sweet sorrow.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks so very much. I let these poems walk me down a path and always hope I find the end. Happy you.. read more
Now that's some poetic pain. Awesome write jack.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend.
enjoyed reading this poem of a million pieces... hope you don't mind,but was thinking, it might read and sound better if you got rid of "cloud" in line two, and if you did a Frieda thing and used "tear'd" instead of tear drop pages. I'm not a very good critiquer, so this may not work for you. liked that image of sub zero burdens.. "icy"
~~redzone

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks my friend. I will take your suggestions to heart. The 'd is a wonderful signature of our dear.. read more
redzone

6 Years Ago

Jack she would be honored and tickled pink
Being a minimalist it's not easy for me reading your work. You heap description on each vision. You are a very talented and prolific writer, and this piece has a particular resonance to my life though.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks Mark. I am happy this one found you and touched you. I just write what I am feeling at the ti.. read more
It's a sad read. The line breaks are a small detail I am very fond of, they really capture the essence of the poem, one of uneven fracturing and splitting along jagged faults. It's very vivid, easy to visualize what's happening.
As a side note, where you aware the title is the same as the famous "memoir" of a drug addict that was later proved to be mostly false?

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks Chaz...no I wasn't aware of that. But now that you mention it, I do remember the book, the bi.. read more
Wonderful sympathy for that special person in the corner of your heart..
An excellent write Jack.
Could taste your empathy...

Scott

Posted 6 Years Ago


Jack...

6 Years Ago

Thanks so much. When a friend is in pain it has a profound effect on me. I appreciate you stopping b.. read more
Scott Metro

6 Years Ago

:)
Scott......

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San Antonio, TX



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Not much to tell about me, I am just Jack, I am a poet, a writer, a musician, a painter, a builder and a dreamer. I live in south Texas but am originally from New Jersey and miss it more and more all .. more..

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