A Million Tiny Pieces

Oh how I wish I could keep it together

 

 

 

A Million Tiny Pieces

 

 

Taken while you wept on clustered fears of empty dreams,

broken remnants shuttered as in some storm cloud cellar

and yet the pain seeps through tiny cracks

invading every pore, seeking that which keeps fracturing

 

Puddles form at frozen feet, unable to move, chilled of anguish,

sub-zero burdens slither their way into the mind’s endless pathways,

hiding in corners, darkened at angular positions,

wedges of meeting points sheltering these evil thoughts

 

Falling on tender knees, hands clenched, pleading on tear drop pages

emotions, these concrete wishes stained on thin lines

appear from chained memories, tethered to branchless trees,

striking swiftly as I watch your heart shatter…

 

into a million tiny pieces on the floor…and I with it

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

I love your writing, Its depth is just awesome. Thank you for sharing.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Jordan. I appreciate you stopping by.

[Shirlena]

Well written with vivid dark imagery of despair,r inner conflict and toward the end, sympathy for the one suffering it seems.

[Jack...]

That is it exactly. Thank you so very much for your kindness.

[Shirlena]

You're welcomed...my pleasure.

[Coyote Poetry]

Would be nice if we could have the repair and be strong again. Time make us weary and fearful of a open heart. A powerful poem that open the door to thoughts and questions. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jack...]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my work. I greatly appreciate you.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

You display the pain of the broken heart and the healing needed, well done, good read.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Thomas. I appreciate you

[Heidi Causey]

Something happened here, it's hard to explain how this poem has touched the little pieces of my own shattered heart. You have given to us a beautifully written piece of work. You could change this poem a thousand ways and have no chance of making it better. The words are perfect, forcing us to dance to a melody thats heart breaking.

I'm so glad a friend suggested I read this. Right now this is perfect.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Heidi. Your kind words today humble me. I always write hoping to touch another, but you have made me smile so brightly with your comments. Thank you again.

[m.s.early]

i think you completely captured unadulterated empathy. great job. what a noble theme and honor to experience someone else's feelings and pen them in such grace and humility. this is classic. inspiring. shelved!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much X. I appreciate your visits and kindness

[redflutterby]

When someone we care for hurts so do we. Its what makes us human. Empathy and compassion are the traits of a true friend. I think youve said that perfectly here.

[Jack...]

Thank you very much.

[Kai Rollins]

One man who could move a nation with mere words...brilliance.

[Jack...]

Sheesh, I don't know about that, but thank you so much.

[Kai Rollins]

Ha well if it counts at all. I believe it

[Giggling Star]

A very moving write Jack. Your talent really stands out in this one. I am left feeling helpless.

[Jack...]

Stargazer, I am always thrilled when you stop by to visit. Thank you so much for your wonderful words to me.

[Giggling Star]

It is my pleasure :).....Star

[Hunter Rose]

This is beautifully written! :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Hunter for your kindness.