Mesmeric Rapture

Inspired by Frieda's Hypnotic Trance

 

Mesmeric Rapture

 

Take this, my needful heart, Sorceress

Break my sweat from swollen pores

Shake that bead’d desperate desire

Simmered sighs of sweltered stew

Tie me down in ribbon’d faire

Infernos blaze deeply below

Cast your spell, incantation’d bliss

Stick inky pins, pointed seduction

Rag doll dances interpreted

Hypnotize me with roguery

Mesmerizing fragrance kisses

Enchanted eternal hocus pocus

Command me spirit’d

Tease me with feathery phantasm

Paint'd black magic aphrodisiac

Stirring with elixir’d lips

Fashion’d to a perfect fit

Tattooed illusion’d obedience

Witch-Crafted to be your man

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh, contraction-ize me....

i felt frieda in this write...style-wise, with your unique touch of heart...

[Jack...]

Her poem was the inspiration my friend. Thanks so very much.

[Marie]

She certainly has you under her spell, doesn't she?

[Jack...]

It's magic Marie. Thanks so much my friend.

[s y e]

Damn dude, you're too good! Everything you write is truly outstanding and you blow me right up to outer space... actually, I think I just saw Pluto. :-)

// Tie me down in ribbon’d faire
Infernos blaze deeply below
Cast your spell, incantation’d bliss //

There is no way I could write anything like this, and if I did it would never be as amazing as yours. I am awestruck, my dear friend. How talented are you? Too talented for your own good.

[Jack...]

You humble me my sweet friend. This was inspired by Frieda's poem Hypnotic Trance. I am thrilled you enjoyed this.

[Madalyn Beck]

Fantastic word use here! I mean, I could never come up with the anything close to the masterpieces you create. Beautiful write!! You blew me away with this! :)

[Jack...]

Oh Madalyn, now stop that. You are a fantastic poetess and I love reading your stuff. I do however always enjoy hearing your take on my poetry...you thrill me to no end. Thank you for being my friend.

[Madalyn Beck]

Always! Thank you for sharing! xo :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

You've done it again my dear friend jack :) You've laid an awesome piece for me to read :D Love the photo you've added here very lovely indeed :) And the format hehe why did you choose to do it, its insanely interesting :)
I haven't read the heading yet and I'm already mesmerized :)
Wow man really strong and deep piece really had read through it again But ultimately awesome piece :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Carl. The reason I chose to format it the way I did was because it was inspired by Frieda's beautiful poem Hypnotic Trance and was kind of a mirrored reflection of her's in my mind so I put it on the opposite side of the page...I appreciate your kindness my friend.

[Carl Drake Barnard]

My pleasure

[Claire in VA]

First of all, adjusting everything to the right is awesome for this! Next, I love "enchanted eternal hocus-pocus" as well as "witch-crafted to be your man." Come to think of it, it could be "enchanted /internal/ hocus-pocus," but it's great just the way you have it!
I like it. :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Claire. I appreciate your kindness to me always.

[David Scott]

"Witch-Crafted" eh?
I think we like to placed the blame on the other foot when the shoe is plane to see... I think it is a voluntary curse we suffer from.
Ha. Mesmerize me please!
Enchanting write.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much my friend. Yep, witch-crafted...just seemed to fit. I appreciate you David. Thanks again for stopping by.

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. That last line Jack was a killer. I hope some religious fanatics don't hang you for that...lol...Just kidding.
You have some wonderful lines in this poem. I think her poetry is doing all of that and her powers...Splendid...:)..........

[Jack...]

Thanks Sami. Frieda's poetry always mesmerizes me...I could just spend my time writing poetry to how her work makes me feel and I'd never run out of words.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. So true...You are welcome...:).........................

[redzone]

Well, Frieda definitely can inspire by her poetry and well, just by being Frieda. Had to smile and nod my head with these lines: "Hypnotize me with rougery..." and "Tease me with feathery phantoms", saying yes, exactly... and isn't love often just this magic and sorcery.. a combination I certainly would enter into in a NY minute... nicely done Jack. ~~redzone

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. yes indeed, Frieda sure is inspiring. I have learned so much from her since coming here. I thought I was a poet before...hell, I wasn't even close. Happy this one cast its spell on your my friend.

[Frieda P]

Woooooooo, what an aftereffect, made me quite dizzy. Who could resist

'Simmered sighs of sweltered stew'

I love that you formatted this one to the right, it's kind of off kilter, the way you
should feel when under a hypnotic sell I'd say. Love

"Paint'd black magic aphrodisiac"

Now that's magical....dark and deep, just the way I like my men. ;-) Perfect Jack.

[Jack...]

Your beautiful poetry inspired it my friend, I was under your spell as I wrote. Thank you so very much for your kindness Frieda. Always my smile appears when you visit my work.

[Frieda P]

I'm so glad my voodoo inspired you Jack, you certainly made it better, I'm under a spell right now, me thinks. ;-)

[Jack...]

Just keep doing that voodoo that you do, so well. :)

[Frieda P]

Hahahaha....will do. ;-)