Re-cooperations

My mind doubts

What is left

We burned it out

With lucky mistakes

A look in your eye

A corner smile

And I'm back there

To where we began.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You have a good concept here and the simplicity of it helps, I think, in conjunction of the brevity. You could use a bit more imagery, I think - one really good one near the end would help this, I think.