Depressed

Where is the blue sky
Where is the sunshine
Why is it so cold
Why is it so grey

Strangers all around
Obstacles and problems i found
Will there be a way
To make them all go away

I want to just disappear
To the darkest, deepest area
No one will ever find me
And finally, I shall be free

Reviews

[Corvus]

Pretty darn good. I love how it is simple, yet it captures your attention with the lines about sunshine and a blue sky. You've got a future as a poet in your hands! Way to go. Welcome to Writer's Block!

Just a suggestion, though, you use 'way' and 'away' to rhyme, and it sounds somewhat off. Maybe you could use some of these words: sway, stay, lay, say.

[Vincent Esprit FMI]

you are very good at capturing the emotions..this is a strong point in your writings Jade......great write

[Jade VK]

thx for the suggestion :D
this is the first poem i have ever written! so i guess i try to be better next time !!