Lost Me

Lost Me

A Poem by J
"

Thought of it while walking home.

"
I was walking alone, going home
I was smiling because I just got to see you today
The next morning, bad news came
"He died of a car accident" that's what they say
I didn't believe them,I knew you were alive
I could see you every time I looked
Is this unreal or did you really survive?
I got to talk to you,I became more stubborn than ever
I kept telling people you were alive
I contradict them whenever they say your life is over
I didn't want to believe them,you know I wouldn't
I could see and talk to you,how come they couldn't?
I thought they were just playing with me and so I continued
To believe that you were here and that you weren't dead
I started to ignore people and walk with only you
Even my parents tell me that they don't know what to do
"You've gone crazy" everyone keeps saying
Another thing they say is that I'm hallucinating
I say NO ! That's not true
I knew that I was really with you
They got really upset and thought things through
There was only one thing left to do
My mom packed my bag,I wondered why
Whenever I ask her,all she does is deny
I got on the car and watched her drive
An hour later we reached a strange place
People I saw were all in white
Strapped bodies,I could feel they were tight
Mom grabbed my bags and led the way
I was feeling scared,I didn't know what to say
A man stood beside me,my mom stopped walking
She put my bags down,I noticed her crying
From then I knew what she was planning to do
She left me with goodbye.It wasn't a good view
The man locked me up in a cell,very dark and cold
None can get in or out,that's what I've been told
I held my knees,it wasn't a nice feeling
To see nothing more but walls and ceilings
I was shocked to see him.the guy I've been seeing
It was all strange to me,to have him beside me
"No" I thought.I suddenly thought
"I AM crazy"  they were right after all
What was depressing  was  that I came to realize this
"He IS dead" and I started to cry
A moment later,I had no sight of him
I felt normal but depressed
I wanted to get out of here
But I know I couldn't
It'll take a lot of time
I hoped that it wouldn't
Now that I'm here alone
I know what I'll do
Pray to God and hope for tomorrow
I'm left in this cell because I wouldn't listen
To the people who loved me,I chose contradiction
I hope to be better sooner or later
I hope for him to stay away from me forever
This is what I learned from him
This is what he made me realize
I was weak and lonely
I quickly lost me

© 2010 J


Author's Note

J
It's been so long since I last posted something

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this is a very good piece of work. it seems off at some parts and seems like u tried too hard to make it rhyme but still i just loved the way u wrote it like a story. Its also incredibly sad and at the point where u finally realise you are delusional, it was heart-wrenching cus i could feel the loneliness there...

Overall its a great write.. I think u really should try writing more poems in story format. You have a great potential. Well done ^_^

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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very nice

Posted 9 Years Ago


While I like what you're trying to say, and the rhyming works out pretty well, your last few stanzas felt a bit choppy, and not as smooth as they could have been. Other than that, I liked the overall dark feel to it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This was full of emotion and very sad. The ending was particularly heart wrenching. A really good piece and and interesting story. You captured the emotions so well there. I loved it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


It's beautiful and truethful. I wish it wouldn't happen to me. My boyfriend is a vampire and I only see him in the Underworld.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow, I love the whole story in poetic formation. It was a fantastic and great write. I quickly got lost into reading this piece, there was so much emotion that the main character was going through, and I always wanted to know what was going to happen next. Perfect piece, well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


very nice. - raw and beautiful. thanks for the read request - sorry it took me so long to get to it- my computer crashed...

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like it. I have an inkling of what it must feel like because my friend went through simliar. you really captured it

Posted 9 Years Ago


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"It's too easy" is an understatement when talking about losing ones self, especially in this world we now live in. But then again, the same world we get lost in is, also the same world that dictates what is sane and insane... After looking out into the world, I'm not so sure I trust their judgment...
Outstanding poem with a Magnificent story line.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I really like it, it's a good read. I really expresses the person's feelings, and what they're going through. I would know, so I give you credit for writing something so meaningful and beautiful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Overall i like the poem however the flow was off. Like a roller coaster or something. The flow just didnt work. The content is good and i like how she comes to realize but i wonder if this happened rather quickly? Good work though i look forward to reading more :).

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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